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A boat floats
suspended
on its mirror image

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An old image revisited...

This series of images is inspired by Haiku - the tiny poems of Japan, traditionally written in seventeen syllables.

Haiku usually gain their effect by suggestion, presenting a clear-cut picture which serves as a starting point for trains of thought and emotion. But because these poems are short, they rarely try to give the picture in detail - the rest the reader must fill in.

In recent years, there has been an enthusiastic and expanding interest in Haiku-in-English. This genre springs from the Japanese form but rarely consists of seventeen syllables. What it does seek to retain is the brevity, clarity, immediacy and resonance of Japanese Haiku and, like a photographic image, to record and share a moment of seeing...

01: strangers
02: curl
03: been there
04: dissatisfied
05: the silence of books
06: one farmer and me
07: the last embrace
08: shallows
09: before the guests
10: retreats to the sea
11: a moment of stillness
12: in between

Thank you for viewing - all feedback (+/-) gratefully received...

Susie :o)

Camera:Canon EOS 300D
Lens:Canon 24-105mm f4 L
Recording media:RAW (digital)
Title:13: suspended
Username:rosie42 rosie42
Uploaded:16 Jul 2008 - 10:54 AM
Tags:General, Haiku
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DeSilver
DeSilver e2 Member 7DeSilver vcard England11 Constructive Critique Points
16 Jul 2008 - 11:04 AM

Beautiful image. Also the photo information and Haiku is very interesting and informative. Smile


David

Last Modified By DeSilver at 16 Jul 2008 - 11:04 AM

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DaveU
DaveU e2 Member 81339 forum postsDaveU vcard England121 Constructive Critique Points
16 Jul 2008 - 11:05 AM

A good feel to this and I liked your description. For me though the boat is much too big in the frame. IMO more space needed above and to the left so that the boat and reflection are part of the image but not overly dominant.

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rosie42
rosie42  10 Australia
16 Jul 2008 - 11:08 AM

Thanks so much for your valued impressions David and Dave... much appreciated!

Susie :o)

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TelStar
TelStar  9116 forum posts United Kingdom
16 Jul 2008 - 11:21 AM

Lovely image and thoughts.

Tel*

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jason3000
jason3000  732 forum posts England
16 Jul 2008 - 11:21 AM

I like this, agree with DaveU on size and position of boat.

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markey075
markey075  693 forum posts United Kingdom
16 Jul 2008 - 11:25 AM

Beauiful!

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whiteswan01
16 Jul 2008 - 11:30 AM

stunning reflection spot on love the colours
Dawn

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Misty56
Misty56  6 United Kingdom1 Constructive Critique Points
16 Jul 2008 - 11:34 AM

this is nice, i loved reading all the imformation, title so right for the photo

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Tomaz
Tomaz  6 United Kingdom
16 Jul 2008 - 11:34 AM

Really like this, especially how you have captured the refelction so well.

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Stace
Stace e2 Member 6Stace vcard England2 Constructive Critique Points
16 Jul 2008 - 11:56 AM

Simple yet stunning
Stace

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dwilkin
dwilkin  724249 forum posts United Kingdom
16 Jul 2008 - 12:11 PM

marvelous tranqil image!

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watchart
watchart  7 United Kingdom
16 Jul 2008 - 12:26 PM

GOOD WORK

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Wooly
Wooly  8112 forum posts England4 Constructive Critique Points
16 Jul 2008 - 12:48 PM

Very serene image Susie, and a very deep and interesting description.

Alan

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peterhookwilde
16 Jul 2008 - 12:48 PM

nice work

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bazhutton
bazhutton  725 forum posts England
16 Jul 2008 - 1:26 PM

Lovely shot.

Baz

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FredF
FredF  7 France
16 Jul 2008 - 1:40 PM

Great reflection, well taken.

Fred

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Moj_o
Moj_o  6 United Kingdom
16 Jul 2008 - 3:11 PM

Lovely Smile

Betty

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ketch
ketch e2 Member 6770 forum postsketch vcard Turks and Caicos Islands50 Constructive Critique Points
16 Jul 2008 - 3:17 PM

This is a very lovely image but I agree with Dave's comments that you have treated the boat and reflection equally when perhaps priority given to the boat giving it more space certainly above might have produced something really amazing rather than simply excellent!

Best wishes

Robert

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SamGillespie
16 Jul 2008 - 5:21 PM

Great simplistic image.
Sam

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fossilized
16 Jul 2008 - 6:16 PM

I also agree with Dave's comment - this is definitely worth a minor reworking. Love the simplicity and tones.
Jean

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markharrop
markharrop  10191 forum posts England
16 Jul 2008 - 7:56 PM

Simple and beautiful!
Works really well for me.
Mark

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rontear
rontear e2 Member 11rontear vcard England4 Constructive Critique Points
16 Jul 2008 - 10:30 PM

Perfect, Susie. Ron.

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pamelajean
pamelajean Critique Team 8763 forum postspamelajean vcard United Kingdom1592 Constructive Critique Points
16 Jul 2008 - 11:04 PM

I'd love to play with this and try different positioning and even toning, it's such a marvellous image.

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rosie42
rosie42  10 Australia
17 Jul 2008 - 12:25 AM

It's good of you to each take the time to view and comment - thank you!

Susie :o)

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motoads
motoads  7 Australia
17 Jul 2008 - 7:37 AM

Hey Susie :o)

This is great, a strong comp and sense of presence here. as usual the poem really complements the image

I dont agree with the composition crit, but hey it takes all types i guess...

great series! ads :o)

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SpeedAltStar
17 Jul 2008 - 10:49 AM

The old pond;
A frog jumps in
The sound of the water

RH Blyth's translation of Basho's famous Haiku. I am sure you must know it. (This was the first Haiku I came across).

And one of my all time favourites:

A blind child
guided by his mother,
admires the cherry blossoms

Can you not feel the texture, smell the scent?

I love what you've done here. Combining Haiku with imagery is a great idea, combining two immensely enjoyable creative outlets.

I have added you to my favourites as I hope you will be continuing along your Haiku journey of observation.

Regards, Ken

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rosie42
rosie42  10 Australia
17 Jul 2008 - 3:33 PM

Cheers Ads, pleased this appeals! Thank you for visiting...

And thank you too Ken for your encouragement and haiku - delighted you're enjoying the series, it's been fun to make!

Susie :o)

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sam10538
sam10538  6 United Kingdom
17 Jul 2008 - 3:47 PM

Great pic and great portfolio

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rosie42
rosie42  10 Australia
19 Jul 2008 - 2:26 PM

Cheers Sam - thank you for your interest...

Susie :o)

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old timer
old timer  1055 forum posts Scotland1 Constructive Critique Points
20 Jul 2008 - 5:21 PM

Beautiful in its simplicity, Susie.
Jim

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rosie42
rosie42  10 Australia
20 Jul 2008 - 11:53 PM

Appreciate your visit Jim - thank you...

Susie :o)

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Patricia Fenn
20 Sep 2008 - 3:09 PM

beautiful image, just perfect in my eyes.
it does almost seem to be suspended, made me hold my breath...

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nonur
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3 Mar 2010 - 6:30 PM

Stunning clear-cut image! It does really function as a haiku!
Congrats!

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