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A girl watching kids taking a dip at the sea. Taken last July 6, 2008.

Please critique, thank you... Somehow I'm proud of this shot, but I just had one (only one!) person tell me my angle was wrong.

She said I could have chosen to get straight behind the girl and shoot so I could've included the horizon. It was the ideal angle and I thought of that, however, directly behind her is an incline with a rottweiler tied nearby. If I ascended that for that angle, I bring myself to close proximity to the rotti. Also, there were low coconut trees that made the ideal shot impossible.

What do you think? Other critiques, of course, are definitely welcome to improve my craft. Thank you.

Camera:Kodak CX7430
Recording media:JPEG (digital)
Title:A Girl Looking at the Sea
Username:seishiro seishiro
Uploaded:10 Jul 2008 - 5:50 AM
Tags:Beach, Girl, Meditation, Photo journalism, Portraits / people
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Carabosse
Carabosse e2 Member 1139675 forum postsCarabosse vcard England269 Constructive Critique Points
11 Jul 2008 - 1:34 AMConstructive Critique!This comment was flagged as constructive critique! 

A pretty effective shot but with a few issues, I think:

(1) A slight colour cast which needs to be removed.
(2) The photo is a little flat looking and needs an increase in brightness and contrast.
(3) It could be given more impact with cropping. At present the figures to the left of the girl add nothing much to the photo. Also there is quite an expanse of sky which diminishes the relative size of the subject.

I have uploaded a mod which attempts to deal with the above and which I hope you will find helpful.

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Tooth
Tooth  95772 forum posts Ireland227 Constructive Critique Points
12 Jul 2008 - 1:39 PM

I don't have any problem with the angle or the stance of the girl, and i think shooting from right behind her would havee de-personalised it. I think CB's tweaks have improved it, certainly the crop gives more emphasis to the subject and de-clutters the image, and the clolour cast does need dealing with. All in all a nice shot though. You could possibly bring a bit more detail into the sky by playing with curves or levels or even a burn brush if you have any of these

Stephen

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