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I took Sophie (in pic) for a walk down an old train track, near where we live we did start out hoping to get some pics near some rustic stairs that are down there and some graffiti in a skate park that is also down there. When we set of the day was overcast, quite a nice setting for taking photo's, but by the time we got there the sun was beaming down, so not having anything to shade the sun or reflect light we opted to take the images under an iron bridge which was totally shaded from the sun and this is one of the images we came up with. As always comments and critique really appreciated

Brand:Canon
Camera:Canon EOS 350D
Lens:70.0-300.0 mm
Recording media:RAW (digital)
Date Taken:4 Jun 2011 - 11:18 PM
Focal Length:190mm
Lens Max Aperture:f/5.6
Aperture:f/5.6
Shutter Speed:1/200sec
Exposure Comp:0.0
ISO:100
Exposure Mode:Manual
Metering Mode:Partial
Flash:On, Red-eye reduction
Title:All Alone
Username:sophis sophis
Uploaded:5 Jun 2011 - 3:57 PM
Tags:Children, Portraits / people
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Jestertheclown
5 Jun 2011 - 9:42 PMConstructive Critique!This comment was flagged as constructive critique! 

This has come out pretty well but it's underexposed and a purist will tell you that your composition's all wrong. Whilst the eye contact is good, with catchlight's, her position indicates that she's heading out of, rather than into the frame. Also the space to the right seems unused. All of which is subjective of course. At least she's on a third!
I've uploaded a mod in which I've adjusted the exposure and added lifted it slightly using curves.
I've also cropped it to a portrait as an alternative.
Hope this helps.

Bren.

Last Modified By Jestertheclown at 5 Jun 2011 - 9:44 PM

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paulbroad e2 Member 789 forum postspaulbroad vcard United Kingdom880 Constructive Critique Points
6 Jun 2011 - 8:34 AMConstructive Critique!This comment was flagged as constructive critique! 

This could be so nice and, for me, your composition is spot on - excellent. You have made the basic error of under exposing by at least a stop and the flash has failed to fill. You were at 190mm, which suggests you may have been out of flash effective range if it was the camera mounted gun. Also, off centre composition, good though it is, will have effected the flash calculation on auto, although I would then have expected over exposure.

Paul

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sophis
sophis e2 Member 8136 forum postssophis vcard United Kingdom6 Constructive Critique Points
6 Jun 2011 - 11:44 AM

Thank you all again for you time and input, I think the exposure being under is my processing, i shoot everything in raw and in processing the image i took the exposure down a bit to what i thought would give it a more dark look, for the feel of the image i wanted. I re-processed it after your comments as i agree it does look too under exposed and have uploaded the new version into my portfolio, again thank you for your comments and critique

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6 Jun 2011 - 3:48 PM

Ive read what you intended above, and I think the concept of the darker shot may work if you graduate the darkness across the shot from right to left.

Ive loaded a mod with this done, - basically corrected exposure, then used a grad filter, while decrasing exposure on the left, and then applied a little diffuse glow to enhance the lighter areas.

Do you think this works?


regards


Willie

Last Modified By banehawi at 6 Jun 2011 - 3:48 PM

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sophis e2 Member 8136 forum postssophis vcard United Kingdom6 Constructive Critique Points
6 Jun 2011 - 5:34 PM

Thanks Willie

I love the mod, I think by adjusting it as you have it tells a better story, and definitely works with the image Grin

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