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Is it ok to include the road in this kind of photo ? Cause I really like the way it was but it doesn't drive the eye to my subject, and I feel like there are 2 diffrent subjects in this picture

Brand:Canon
Camera:Canon EOS 500D
Lens:EF-S18-55mm f/3.5-5.6
Recording media:JPEG (digital)
Date Taken:21 Oct 2012 - 4:40 PM
Focal Length:55mm
Lens Max Aperture:f/5.7
Aperture:f/5.6
Shutter Speed:1/125sec
Exposure Comp:-2/3
ISO:400
Exposure Mode:Aperture-priority AE
Metering Mode:Multi-segment
Flash:On, Fired
White Balance:Custom
Title:Andreea
Username:DanielaS DanielaS
Uploaded:25 Oct 2012 - 5:15 AM
Tags:Photo journalism, Portraits / people, Transport, Wildlife / nature
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arhab
arhab  243 forum posts Indonesia2 Constructive Critique Points
25 Oct 2012 - 8:53 AM

i think it will better to crop the right side/the road because as you said, it make the scene divided. if you want include the road try to give more room in the front of the subject/the woman.

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Focus_Man
Focus_Man  4481 forum posts United Kingdom631 Constructive Critique Points
25 Oct 2012 - 9:44 AMConstructive Critique!This comment was flagged as constructive critique! 

Most certainly I would crop off the right hand side and your logo as well, neither helps the image. Once cropped, the image will be fairly good technically, but your model is not enthusing a lot about being your subject here is she? She seems to be a little dour with a contrived arm behing her head.

EXIF I don't know if you intentionally used full aperture to give differential focussing, i say that because you feel that the path is another subject within the frame, that being your wish then I would ahve used a smaller aperture say f8 and adjusted the ISO rating accordingly. Given the dark nature of the area, neither would I have dialled in negative exposure compensation.

Your use of flash here seems to have worked fairly well, not taking over the lighting and that too would have been the case with an aperture of f8.

This has the possibility of being a nice shot.

Frank

Last Modified By Focus_Man at 25 Oct 2012 - 9:45 AM

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parob
parob e2 Member 3parob vcard France69 Constructive Critique Points
25 Oct 2012 - 12:36 PMConstructive Critique!This comment was flagged as constructive critique! 

Now, I kind of like this shot. The subject is absolutely stunning. Even though the flash striking the white t-shirt distracts, the face and hair concentrate the entire attention. I also like the cardigan's details, but there is a problem. The road fades away as it should, yet the very strong contrast between background and foreground spoil the image. The photographer's comments make it clear she sensed that. This problem leads to some kind of artificiality. Even the subject's hand on the back of the neck seems artificial. There is also a distracting detail showing on the right side of the subject, from the arm to the belt.
Why the overall problem? I think it occurs because the intensity of the flash sculpts too much, and also because of the artificial position taken by the model. A remedy? It is possible to crop out as much as possible of the road, and to cut just above the subject's belt. This eliminates much of the problem. If you do this, you should also soften the skin colour of the forehand, otherwise it draws too much attention away from the face. Also, adding a little more hair detail on top of the head might help. You have the eye and a good sense. Happy photography, Daniela.

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banehawi
banehawi Critique Team 10781 forum postsbanehawi vcard Canada2797 Constructive Critique Points
25 Oct 2012 - 2:54 PMConstructive Critique!This comment was flagged as constructive critique! 

I agree with your own assessment. You have a good landscape opportunity behind a portrait, shot in landscape orientation.

Youve tagged it as a portrait, as well as nature, and I think at the time of shooting you made it a portrait. It can only work as a nature landscape if the model is walking away from you towards that bend; you may have had to use a wider focal length. Having her walking away, and perhaps with a slight turn of her head back towards you would have worked.


Ive regarded it as a portrait in my mods, and Ive uploaded a portrait crop along with a landscape crop. Both required the addition of a little more space at the top, and both have colour balance a little warmer; highlights toned down; and shadows lifted a little.


Hope this helps


regards


Willie

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paulbroad
paulbroad  681 forum posts United Kingdom842 Constructive Critique Points
25 Oct 2012 - 7:01 PM

Well, I feel the path is entirely acting as a background and, unsharp as it is, can in no way be considered a subject. The girl is very clearly indeed the prominent and only subject. The flash fill has worked well, but not the hand in the hair. That is a classic glamour pose and does not suite a rustic environmental portrait.

Hands are difficult to deal with. You needed them holding somethig, wild flowers, a stick?

PAULWink

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Jestertheclown
25 Oct 2012 - 9:51 PM

Personally, I think that with regard to the composition, it's fine as it is.
The road and indeed the rest of the background is suitably out of focus and couldn't be considered to be a shot in its own right.
Your logo doesn't bother me.

Bren.

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