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Another shot of my good friend Ann suffering as a practice model while I try and take a a decent portrait. Thanks to all the guys who critiqued my first shot of Ann, any further comments would be so welcome.

Camera:Canon EOS 60D
Lens:Lense and setting as for previous upload of Ann
Recording media:JPEG (digital)
Title:Ann again
Username:Lelah Lelah
Uploaded:2 Mar 2014 - 9:08 AM
Tags:Portraits / people
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mashwood10
mashwood10 e2 Member 2mashwood10 vcard United Kingdom
2 Mar 2014 - 9:19 AM

Lovely portrait of a beautiful lady.

PamGrinGrinGrin

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Bluke
Bluke  9303 forum posts United Kingdom1 Constructive Critique Points
2 Mar 2014 - 10:12 AM

Lelah this is a love portrait of your friend and I be she is so pleased with it.. What a smile...

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Coast
Coast Critique Team 6903 forum postsCoast vcard United Kingdom290 Constructive Critique Points
2 Mar 2014 - 3:35 PM

In many respects this addresses the issues raised with your previous upload - catchlight in the eyes are better with a single dominant highlight in each. I'd clone out the other light reflections as per my comment on your last upload.

Your not shooting up Anne's nose which again is an improvement.

The more traditional portrait framing works well.

On this version however you have not got the sharpness needed on the eyes - this is critical in this type of portraiture (in fact almost all portraiture but like everything there are occasions to break the rules - but not here!).

Anne's chest and collar bone look where the image is most sharp.

There is also an odd blurring across the neck, under the chin. Is this something you have done in processing? If not it looks like you may have a small smear on your lens when you took this.

Also look at all the detail in the frame. Is there anything likely to distract or imbalance? For instance here I would want to lose the shiny strap that just appears in the bottom right of the frame. Best done at the taking time to avoid having to clone out in processing.

You have uploaded to the standard gallery so I am unable to upload a mod as I did earlier.

This version has better more natural colouring than your last one. The overall expression and framing is lovely it just has to be pin sharp on those eyes.

So some real plus's and if those eyes were sharp you'd have a keeper here. Great and attractive subject so keep her sweet so you can keep practising : )

Hope that helps.

Regards
Paul

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