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From Holly's fashion shoot.

Another of Ashley....put this in the portrait section instead of fashion.

Used a reflector to light the model. Plus window light.

Quite like the boxing poster and the rubbish on the floor.

Camera:Nikon D200 Check out Nikon Nation!
Lens:17-55
Recording media:TIFF (digital)
Title:Ashley
Username:CathyT CathyT
Uploaded:30 Apr 2008 - 8:42 AM
Tags:Fashion, Portraits / people
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Just Jas
Just Jas  1225752 forum posts England1 Constructive Critique Points
30 Apr 2008 - 8:50 AM

Latter day Cinderella? (the broom and general squalor)
jas

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Boyd
Boyd  1111213 forum posts Wales11 Constructive Critique Points
30 Apr 2008 - 8:52 AM

Hard to recognise your front room since you've had a tidy up.

Wink

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CathyT
CathyT e2 Member 87282 forum postsCathyT vcard United Kingdom18 Constructive Critique Points
30 Apr 2008 - 8:53 AM

LOL........the hoovers broken. Wink

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Richsr
Richsr e2 Member 790 forum postsRichsr vcard England210 Constructive Critique Points
30 Apr 2008 - 8:56 AM

Like the lighting and details in this Cathy - well setup and captured.
Regards Richard.

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MediumSizeUnavailable

Powerful, enigmatic, beautiful body.






Ali at the hight of his career.


Girl looks good too Grin

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CathyT
CathyT e2 Member 87282 forum postsCathyT vcard United Kingdom18 Constructive Critique Points
30 Apr 2008 - 9:13 AM

Thanks for your comments.....

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SteveCharles
30 Apr 2008 - 9:17 AM

I thought you meant Cathy, Koen... Wink

Nicely done, this is a really good series. Steve.

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rewfishing
30 Apr 2008 - 9:18 AM

"floats like a butterfly and stings like a bee"
"dont be fooled, so does muhammad ali"
great subject , great lighting , nice subject and backround.. can i have her number lol REW

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Wooly
Wooly  9112 forum posts England4 Constructive Critique Points
30 Apr 2008 - 9:44 AM

Excellent shot, very nice bit of light an Ashley.

Alan

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Tonyd3
Tonyd3  101009 forum posts United Kingdom15 Constructive Critique Points
30 Apr 2008 - 9:47 AM

Excellent and very much in the current vogue of portraits

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GregorP
GregorP  9 Slovenia
30 Apr 2008 - 9:48 AM

Awesome shot and good exposure! I like it.

Gregor

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imander  7388 forum posts United Kingdom7 Constructive Critique Points
30 Apr 2008 - 9:52 AM

wonderfully composed, really pretty model which contrasts well with the decaying b/g
ian

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freybird
freybird  8 England1 Constructive Critique Points
30 Apr 2008 - 10:24 AM

Like this and previous upload with the sharp contrast background & subject. Thought the one of the two models was too close making the background distracting rather than interesting as in this shot. Geoff

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CathyT
CathyT e2 Member 87282 forum postsCathyT vcard United Kingdom18 Constructive Critique Points
30 Apr 2008 - 10:31 AM


Quote: Thought the one of the two models

Can you explain again , I don't understand...do you mean Holly's shot?

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Douglas_George
30 Apr 2008 - 10:42 AM

Great image Cathy, well captured.

Dougie.

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chris-p
chris-p e2 Member 964 forum postschris-p vcard England
30 Apr 2008 - 1:07 PM

Super shot...the exposure looks spot on ....

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Mike Gray
Mike Gray  10382 forum posts United Kingdom
30 Apr 2008 - 1:21 PM

Gets my vote Cathy.

Mike

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Possum  8148 forum posts England
30 Apr 2008 - 6:19 PM

Lovely luminosity on her face.
Allie

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paulsimmons
30 Apr 2008 - 7:38 PM

You cant keep doing this to me shugs, I'm checking every day now to see the new one, Its more addictive than that Jeremy viel programme in the mornings.
I love the Light, the skin tones of the model, the harshness of the room underwriten by the boxer, the size of the brush and how small the spade looks, oh man help....

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CathyT
CathyT e2 Member 87282 forum postsCathyT vcard United Kingdom18 Constructive Critique Points
30 Apr 2008 - 7:48 PM

Thanks Paul..my new flash gun arrived hopefully I will see a big difference.

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Westers
Westers  103905 forum posts Burkina Faso1 Constructive Critique Points
1 May 2008 - 9:55 PM

Now this is classy.

And I'm talking about the picture..although she is as well, but she's too young for me Tongue

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CathyT e2 Member 87282 forum postsCathyT vcard United Kingdom18 Constructive Critique Points
1 May 2008 - 10:05 PM

Yes, she much to young for you.....18.

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Westers
Westers  103905 forum posts Burkina Faso1 Constructive Critique Points
1 May 2008 - 11:13 PM

18 ???? Blimey, game on. Wink Tongue

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clevercloggs
2 May 2008 - 4:09 AMConstructive Critique!This comment was flagged as constructive critique! 

good photo, I would prefer a bit more sulk on the face; after all she is sitting in a dusty and dirty environment dressed in a evening gown.

like the way you've placed the light on her face. are the eyes a bit too bright?
Good composition, also the rest of the room is pleasantly lit

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CathyT
CathyT e2 Member 87282 forum postsCathyT vcard United Kingdom18 Constructive Critique Points
2 May 2008 - 11:12 AM

I was using the reflector silver side up...perhaps I should have used the white side....

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clevercloggs
3 May 2008 - 12:59 AM

if in relation to my remark on the eyes, the silver side up seems to be the better of the 2 (although not an expert on this).
Does that mean you did not enhance the eyes separately?

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CathyT
CathyT e2 Member 87282 forum postsCathyT vcard United Kingdom18 Constructive Critique Points
3 May 2008 - 11:18 AM

I think the reflector was a bit harsh on her face.....The only think I did to her was slightly darken her whole face as it was lighter than her body...that was it. Didn't touch her eyes , cloned out a few blemishes and put a 20% blur on her skin.

.....a sulky face would work....I'll ask her next time Wink

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alwolf  7341 forum posts England3 Constructive Critique Points
3 May 2008 - 6:13 PM

Like the contast with the model and how she is dressed compared with the surroundings.
alan

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Simon-Gimson
14 May 2008 - 4:35 PM

loving this set

Si

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stix e2 Member 10924 forum postsstix vcard United Kingdom87 Constructive Critique Points
18 May 2008 - 7:31 PMConstructive Critique!This comment was flagged as constructive critique! 

Hi Cathy
OK this is a fashion shot, not really my area of expertise, but I would have thought if the idea is to show off the dress to its best advantage, then I'm afraid this is a poor shot.
The pose means the arm is covering the top and sitting down means we cant see how it fits. Also probably too much eye contact if the emphasis is on the dress. See some of Nealís latest shots to see how a dress should be shown.
OK just read your description, its not a fashion shot! Doh!start again.

Hard to know where to place this. This is an environmental portrait , with the twist of a juxtaposition of glamorous girl and shabby setting. Does this work? For me no. Firstly because I think the portrait is poor and the background does not compensate for this.
If the girl was interacting with the background then that might lift it ( you know like playing twisterÖ. ), but she isnít , she could be sitting in a studio.

As a portrait , itís a young pretty girl in a glamorous dress, so Iím going to judge it as a glamorous portrait. Unfortunately I find the pose awkward, Iím not enjoying the defensive crossing of arms over her chest, the extended bony looking hands, which hang away from her body in am uncomfortable looking way. The pose is also hiding her waist which is not very flattering.

As a non glamorous portrait , Iím looking for feeling , emotion , a glimpse into the persons soul. Sorry Cathy Iím getting none of these. What I am getting is a rather blank look which can be enigmatic but in this case looks like boredom.

On a technical note, the right arm is over exposed and I feel you have over whitened her eyes so that they donít appear natural.

On the background, with this type of location shot, the first thing to do is Ďclear the setí and then add back what you want included in the shot. This is good practice.
Now with a clear set, if you had asked is there something missing? What can we add to enhance the look? I doubt very much if the answer would have been , What this shot needs is a shovel and a broom, go and find some.. I find them distracting and unnecessary they are not aesthetically pleasing and add nothing to the narrative ( such as you have one)

The shot has 70 clicks so cant be all bad! Though it doesnít work for me, I have clicked it to encourage you to try again. Next time, have a stronger vision, a narrative, a concept before you get there and enjoy creating that vision, and donít stop until you have it.
HTHÖÖÖÖ..

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CathyT e2 Member 87282 forum postsCathyT vcard United Kingdom18 Constructive Critique Points
18 May 2008 - 10:18 PM


Quote: Next time, have a stronger vision, a narrative, a concept before you get there and enjoy creating that vision, and donít stop until you have it.

Thank you Martin for such an in depth crit...I think the quote above sums up everything I didn't do , hence , why it has not worked. I'm hoping to re shoot at this location so I have plenty to think about and can hopefullt improve it.


Quote: doubt very much if the answer would have been , What this shot needs is a shovel and a broom

PMSL

You've given me plenty to think about. I've just read this out to Holly so it will hopefully help her too. Thank you.

Cathy

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bliba  8 Austria2 Constructive Critique Points
29 Jul 2008 - 1:41 PM

excellent

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