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Another from my shoot with this aspiring model. Comments/critiques more than welcomed!

Camera:Fuji S3
Lens:SIGMA 70 - 200
Title:Attitude
Username:debbiehardy debbiehardy
Uploaded:9 Sep 2005 - 5:21 AM
Tags:Portraits / people
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keithh
keithh e2 Member 1022910 forum postskeithh vcard Wallis and Futuna31 Constructive Critique Points
9 Sep 2005 - 5:24 AM

couple of things really...lose the 1980's ripped jeans...and think about backgrounds...ie the pylon behind him.,,and I'd just get in a bit closer with a larger aperture.

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chrisfroud
9 Sep 2005 - 5:25 AM

Have to agree with Keith, neither the ripped jeans or pylon are a good look! Definitely need to focus in closer on the model. Also, the pose looks a little stiff and rigid - try to encourage them to relax a little.

Chris.

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jeffa
jeffa  932 forum posts United Kingdom
9 Sep 2005 - 6:19 AM

Agree abut the pylon Debbie, but he could have ripped his jeans on the barbed wire fence behind him!
Jeff

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mellyleth
mellyleth  10212 forum posts United Kingdom
9 Sep 2005 - 6:24 AM

I must admit, I nearly bypassed this shot due to the location, which is not really doing the image any favours. However, your model is posing well, good eye contact and the exposure and sharpness is good. I have done a drastic mod. I wasn't keen on the barbed wire fence but didn't really have time to clone that out. Personally, I thought black and white suited well.

A good looking model though, definitely potential there. I agree with Keith too about using a larger aperture as it would've blurred out the background a bit and made it less conspicuous. Hope you don't mind all these suggestions..!

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debbiehardy
9 Sep 2005 - 6:38 AM

Definately don't mind any suggestions - everyone has something valuable to add.

Michael and I took around 100 shots and we chose to upload this one because of the location.

We wanted something a bit different - but it's good to get feedback to see if people think it works or not.

I'm going to carry on with this series of shots over the next couple of days.

Thanks for the mod. Mel...off to look now!

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debbiehardy
9 Sep 2005 - 6:44 AM

Hi again, I like the b&w and the crop. Michael's most pleased with your comments, btw!!

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mellyleth
mellyleth  10212 forum posts United Kingdom
9 Sep 2005 - 6:51 AM

Thanks Deb, glad you like it. In my opinion, I think your main problem was the pylon and not zooming into your model enough.

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debbiehardy
9 Sep 2005 - 9:07 AM

Thanks for the mod Ian. Are you thinking for a CD?

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tull
tull  11181 forum posts United Kingdom
9 Sep 2005 - 9:08 AM

Certainly a great pose and foreground Debbie but must admit I do find the pylon lets the shot down..sorry mate.

Mark.

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debbiehardy
9 Sep 2005 - 9:15 AM

Very interesting to get all the different opinions.

I posted this a couple of days ago, and got advice re using ripped jeans and industrial backgrounds which we've tried here. Just shows that you can't suit all of the people......

The one who matters - Michael, the model loves the shots and is buying a Graphibook, so I'm very pleased with the outcome Smile

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ginz04
ginz04  10276 forum posts United Kingdom16 Constructive Critique Points
9 Sep 2005 - 9:35 AM

hi debbie for me the pic is definately model on rocks - barbed wire is going through his head and agree about pylons.

Model with potential. ian

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someone new
9 Sep 2005 - 9:47 AM

this is well cool mum!!!!!

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gorf
gorf  10
9 Sep 2005 - 1:18 PM

Oh, so this is the reason I haven't seen you all week?

The penny drops!

I agree that the barbed wire shouldn't be going through his head (despite being jealous) but I quite like the Pylon in-shot. And someone needs to tell the kids round here that ripped jeans, pastel colours, labels and the music from the 80's are all out of fashion, because they seem to think they are coming back in!

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KBan
KBan  9457 forum posts England4 Constructive Critique Points
9 Sep 2005 - 1:46 PM

i like it!!!!
Keith

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Mavis
Mavis e2 Member 12143 forum postsMavis vcard England2 Constructive Critique Points
9 Sep 2005 - 1:47 PM

Think you need a few close ups and see the whites of his eyes sparkling Debbie . Mmmm young man !! Let me at him . LOL only joking . xx

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debbiehardy
9 Sep 2005 - 1:48 PM

Thankyou, Mark, Ian, Tom Gareth and Keith for comments...all appreciated.

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debbiehardy
9 Sep 2005 - 1:50 PM

Oh, hello Mavis! Thankyou...look out for a close up tomorrow!
No swooning allowed, this is strictly professional lol!

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Mavis
Mavis e2 Member 12143 forum postsMavis vcard England2 Constructive Critique Points
9 Sep 2005 - 2:02 PM

God I can't wait for his Twin if you take them together it will be more than I can stand !! LOL . Still I might die happy Smile xx

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debbiehardy
9 Sep 2005 - 2:10 PM

Nowthen Mavis!!!

Michael's following this thread with interest lol!!

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billydo
billydo e2 Member 1178 forum postsbillydo vcard United Kingdom
10 Sep 2005 - 12:39 AM

I like the location as it is Debbie, but thought the pose looked a little awkward..? As you've said though, it's what the customer thinks that really matters.
Neal.

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Patricia Fenn
12 Sep 2005 - 4:14 PM

have to agree with Mellyleth, sums it up for me.
You've done a great job with your model though, he seems to know what it's all about...but at that age they know everything, don't they Smile

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helly
helly  10
18 Sep 2005 - 8:18 AM

Hi Debbie
I think the pic is a good reflection of modern youth culture, doesn't matter where they are they are always caught with their feet up! Just joshing. Nice pic, but he should lay off the sun bed at his age.
I'll take a look at work and see if i can find any of the fashion reference books we use that might help you with ideas.

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debbiehardy
18 Sep 2005 - 2:48 PM

Thankyou, Neal, Pat and Helena. Debbie.

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scotpics  10
20 Sep 2005 - 6:43 AM

Before I read all the comments my thoughts were that I'd have cropped it round the model and the rocks to give it a 'rougher' look that went better with the torn jeans. Mel has modified it the way I would have too had I done it myself.

Model needs to do something with that hair (though that's just a personal thought), but I've had a couple with similar hairstyles that I photographed but didn't like.

Alan

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