Login or Join Now

Upload your photos, chat, win prizes and much more

Username:
Password:
Remember Me

Can't Access your Account?

New to ePHOTOzine? Join ePHOTOzine for free!

Black Board.

Join Now

Join ePHOTOzine, the friendliest photography community.

Upload photos, chat with photographers, win prizes and much more for free!

Add Comment

I want to try to be more active-creative in photography and videography. I need to perfect my skills how to handle my camera, and improve my post production workflow.

Brand:OLYMPUS IMAGING CORP.
Camera:Olympus OM-D E-M1
Lens:voigtlander nokton 50mm
Recording media:RAW (digital)
Date Taken:20 Apr 2014 - 9:52 AM
Lens Max Aperture:f/1.0
Shutter Speed:1/2000sec
Exposure Comp:0.0
ISO:200
Exposure Mode:Manual
Metering Mode:Multi-segment
Flash:Auto, Did not fire
White Balance:Auto
Title:Black Board.
Username:phoney phoney
Uploaded:22 Apr 2014 - 10:30 AM
Tags:Digitally manipulated, Landscape / travel, Portraits / people, Sports / action, Wildlife / nature
VS Mode Rating 101 (53.33% won)
These stats show the percentage of wins and the rating score that your photo has achieved. You can go to the VS Mode by clicking on this icon.

Signup to e2

Signup to e2 to see which photo this has won or lost against in the vs mode
Votes:Voting Disabled
Critque wantedCritique Wanted
Has Modifications Modifications Welcome (Upload a Modification)
Awards have been disabled on this photo

Comments

This photo is here for critique. Please only comment constructively and with suggestions on how to improve it.
paulbroad
paulbroad e2 Member 789 forum postspaulbroad vcard United Kingdom880 Constructive Critique Points
22 Apr 2014 - 12:52 PM

The none Olympus lens appears to perform well. The figure and board are a little lost in the image. Composition is good, but I suspect some other work with a tonal range varied from correct in the foreground to well under on the background? Youneed to lift the figure by brightening the background a touch.

Paul

Nominating Constructive Critique

Please ensure that you understand what is meant by Constructive Critique - see FAQ here. If you still wish to nominate this comment click Yes

phoney
phoney e2 Member phoney vcard
22 Apr 2014 - 1:16 PM

Thanks for your comment. My goal was the figure of the boy and the board to be like that. Maybe i took it too far. Thanks again.

Nominating Constructive Critique

Please ensure that you understand what is meant by Constructive Critique - see FAQ here. If you still wish to nominate this comment click Yes

mrswoolybill
mrswoolybill Critique Team 8530 forum postsmrswoolybill vcard United Kingdom1094 Constructive Critique Points
22 Apr 2014 - 2:24 PM

Hi Paul, welcome to the site and to the Critique Gallery, I see that this is your first upload here. I hope you will enjoy it and find it a good place to learn. We try to give advice that will help people to improve their photography both the taking and the editing of images.

I like the overall composition here, with the board pointing towards the distant horizon. That's about hopes, dreams, ambitions. But it's also pointing leftwards - a lot of people would prefer this to be pointing rightwards as the natural direction for our brains to read a positive, up-beat mood but I prefer the more reflective, quiet effect of a leftward direction of movement.

Photographing contre-jour - against the light - is always a challenge, the sun was at a useful angle here and you have avoided flare. The background is a wee bit underexposed but the foreground water is perfect.

The problem really is the figure - he looks to be a young lad struggling with a large board, and as a result the figure doesn't come across as a strong silhouette - everything between neck and knees is pretty well obscured. A silhouette (and this is nearly that) needs strong body language; if only his right foot was a bit further forward...! The alternative would be to use flash, which would give detail in the figure without losing the strength of the background.

Moira

Nominating Constructive Critique

Please ensure that you understand what is meant by Constructive Critique - see FAQ here. If you still wish to nominate this comment click Yes

phoney
phoney e2 Member phoney vcard
22 Apr 2014 - 2:53 PM

Useful pointers. Thanks.

Nominating Constructive Critique

Please ensure that you understand what is meant by Constructive Critique - see FAQ here. If you still wish to nominate this comment click Yes

dudler
dudler Critique Team 11164 forum postsdudler vcard England391 Constructive Critique Points
22 Apr 2014 - 6:56 PM

Welcome from me, too. I hope you have as much fun at EPZ as I've had, and continue to have!

I really like htis: there's so much in the boy and his board to enjoy. For me, the two most important parts are the way it's bigger than he is, and that elegant, willowy, but quite tentative pose.

Moira's right that the near-silhoouette is a problem, as it partly conceals the pose. I suspect that the right processing would bring in a little more detail, but I'm not quite sure what it needs to do this... I'm also working in a hotel, on a laptop, so I may be leaving serious mods to others (on the grounds that they are far more talented than I with processiing!) However artificial it is, I'd like to see more detail in there. I would, though, be nervous of flash: partly because it kills mood (unless you are Martin Parr, of course), but largely because high voltages and water don't mix terribly well...

Nicely observed!

Nominating Constructive Critique

Please ensure that you understand what is meant by Constructive Critique - see FAQ here. If you still wish to nominate this comment click Yes

banehawi
banehawi Critique Team 10988 forum postsbanehawi vcard Canada2984 Constructive Critique Points
22 Apr 2014 - 7:42 PM

You can get a better result if you underexpose the shot at the time you take it. Something like the mod Ive uploaded.

Use exposure compensation, and try -1 or -2


Regards


Willie

Nominating Constructive Critique

Please ensure that you understand what is meant by Constructive Critique - see FAQ here. If you still wish to nominate this comment click Yes

- Original Poster Comments
- Your Posts

Add a Comment

You must be a member to leave a comment

Username:
Password:
Remember me:
Un-tick this box if you want to login each time you visit.