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Here's my illustration of Cain being denied by The Lord. Worms eye view of him staring helplessly at a light that barely shines on him. supported by heavy shadows at the bottom of the image and an off centered background to project his sense of distraught confusion.

accompanying text describes concepts on Cain and Abel's relationship and personalities.

Brand:Canon
Camera:Canon EOS 450D
Lens:EF-S18-55mm f/3.5-5.6 IS
Recording media:JPEG (digital)
Date Taken:14 Oct 2012 - 6:30 AM
Focal Length:20mm
Lens Max Aperture:f/3.5
Aperture:f/4.0
Shutter Speed:1/80sec
Exposure Comp:0.0
ISO:200
Exposure Mode:Manual
Metering Mode:Multi-segment
Flash:Off, Did not fire
White Balance:Manual
Title:Cain The Daunted
Username:BrianHenry BrianHenry
Uploaded:5 Aug 2013 - 11:15 PM
Tags:Apple, Bible, Dark, Flash, Gray, Pale, Portraits, Portraits / people, Tall, Underexposed, Vertical
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mrswoolybill
mrswoolybill Critique Team 7395 forum postsmrswoolybill vcard United Kingdom971 Constructive Critique Points
6 Aug 2013 - 8:11 AM

The Biblical narrative is an essential part of your project, obviously. But I'm still concerned that you are telling us what to see and what to feel.

Quote: his sense of distraught confusion...

The thing is, if the image works we should see that ourselves without being told.
Yes I do see a frightened adolescent, caught in the act and panicking. Catching him with his stolen red apples, rather than with blood on his hands, is witty. But I'm also seeing lack of focus, and lack of contrast in the light. Stronger light on his face would create more drama.
Moira

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paulbroad
paulbroad  681 forum posts United Kingdom843 Constructive Critique Points
6 Aug 2013 - 11:20 AM

There is the basis of a good image here without the bible bit. The problem here is general quality. Pretty unsharp across the frame and I would want at least some sharp point.

Paul

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banehawi
banehawi Critique Team 10781 forum postsbanehawi vcard Canada2803 Constructive Critique Points
6 Aug 2013 - 3:08 PM

Ive uploaded a mod of this, scroll up and click the modifications tab.

Some part being sharp will improve this, Ive sharpened the face and hands; I might look better darker, - youre trying to show a single light source in a dark frame, so darkening the darker areas enhances this; the low angle, while making the worms viewpoint clear, also makes his hands look bigger than his head, - maybe thats what you wanted.

As I mentioned on the last upload, these images are all connected as a series, and dont connect with each other at all when seen individually. Look to me like a man stealing apples at night, and caught by surprise.


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Willie

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