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if you could tell me what you think , bad or good comments so i can work on where im going wrong thank youu

Camera:Fujifilm FinePix S2950HD
Lens:fujinon 18x optical zoom
Recording media:JPEG (digital)
Title:Dance Teacher
Username:katiejames_2012 katiejames_2012
Uploaded:17 Sep 2012 - 6:58 AM
Tags:Black & white, Colour pop, Dancer, People
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KarenFB
KarenFB Junior Gallery Team 74167 forum postsKarenFB vcard England160 Constructive Critique Points
17 Sep 2012 - 8:01 AM

A girl with attitude! I really like the fact you've chosen to use black and white, but colour select the hat - it really makes a good eye catching image.

I feel the pose has given you some composition problems, for instance she's lost one leg/foot completely and the other is out of frame, and you may have slightly over sharpened (the fence seems to have an echo). Was this taken at night, using a flash?

When uploading for critique it's always really helpful to have as much information as possible. Smile

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Gerryrys
Gerryrys  2 United Kingdom1 Constructive Critique Points
17 Sep 2012 - 9:57 AM

Hi, It is a striking pose and the use of the coloured had against mono works well. The thumbnail makes you want to open the picture which on this site is a definate plus.

The face is the brightest part of the image as it should be to draw the attention there but it appears slightly over exposed on my screen. I am not sure the missing limbs are a problem. We know they are there somewhere. If the crop had not been so tight the picture would imho lose impact. Smile

Gerry

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Focus_Man
Focus_Man  4481 forum posts United Kingdom631 Constructive Critique Points
17 Sep 2012 - 10:28 AM

Quite compelling and I like the colour popping. I have uploaded a mod where I very quickly removed the 'flying leg' and squared up the tiles behind your model. I simply used -Image - Transform - Distort followed by a bit of cloning.

In order for critique to be more complete, please be sure to upload your EXIF data, without that a good chunk of help is not possible.

Frank

Last Modified By Focus_Man at 17 Sep 2012 - 10:31 AM

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banehawi
banehawi Critique Team 9708 forum postsbanehawi vcard Canada2668 Constructive Critique Points
17 Sep 2012 - 3:45 PM

Its edgy and interesting. The coloured hat is a good idea. On the upload page, on the right, halfway down, theres a link marked addition exif data or something like that, - click it when uploading and we will see your exif data, which tells us about you shutter speed, aperture, mode, etc.

And, - lets know which image sogtware you use.



regards


Willie

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drayl002
drayl002 Junior Member 334 forum posts United Kingdom3 Constructive Critique Points
17 Sep 2012 - 6:36 PM

Love the focal color and the position, could be made straight though,

Luke

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paulbroad
paulbroad  681 forum posts United Kingdom825 Constructive Critique Points
18 Sep 2012 - 8:14 AM

A lot of instant impact which makes you look. I like what you have presented. Popping is good, contrast is too high but that is one reason the image works. Has a certain area of appeal.

Paul

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katiejames_2012

Luke : The photo is straight the fence was bent so the photo looks like its on an angle which it aint and i tried making it look straight but the photo went all blury so i left it alone and thanks paul Grin

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Focus_Man
Focus_Man  4481 forum posts United Kingdom631 Constructive Critique Points
18 Sep 2012 - 9:31 AM


Quote: Luke : The photo is straight the fence was bent so the photo looks like its on an angle which it aint and i tried making it look straight but the photo went all blury so i left it alone and thanks paul Grin

I have straightened it for you and a slight clockwise rotation was needed. See the position of her hands, left one higher than her right.

Frank

Last Modified By Focus_Man at 18 Sep 2012 - 9:34 AM

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Sooty_1
Sooty_1 Critique Team 31125 forum posts United Kingdom192 Constructive Critique Points
18 Sep 2012 - 6:23 PM

Sorry, but I disagree with everyone here...I don't like the selective colour on the hat.

The pose is dynamic and interesting, the lighting and processing, I like, and her expression is good. I would also hide the leg for better composition.
You could even angle it more for extra dynamism.

The problem for me, with selective colour, is that it becomes the subject by drawing your attention to it. The subject here is not the hat, but the girl's face and pose, but they become secondary to the colour. Take the colour away, and her face again becomes the focal point.
Not to say it isn't done well, I just don't like it.

Unfortunately, it seems that a lot of people do selective colour because it is possible to do it, rather than thinking what it adds to the photograph. IMHO, the best ones of these take what might be a small item and make it the subject by unnaturally emphasising it's importance within the picture....eye colour in a face portrait for instance, a car within a landscape, the (cliched) phone box or London bus.

Nick

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