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Here is another of my photos from the 'Gatsby Glamour' photo shoot.

This photo was converted to B&W to try and capture the essence of the film, 'The Artist'. Hope it achieved that!

Any critique is welcomed.

Brand:NIKON CORPORATION
Camera:Nikon D7000 Check out Nikon Nation!
Lens:24.0-70.0 mm f/2.8
Recording media:RAW (digital)
Date Taken:7 Mar 2012 - 12:29 PM
Focal Length:70mm
Lens Max Aperture:f/2.8
Aperture:f/3.2
Shutter Speed:1/60sec
Exposure Comp:0.0
ISO:400
Exposure Mode:Manual
Metering Mode:Multi-segment
Flash:On, Return not detected
White Balance:Custom
Title:Dominion Theatre 'Gatsby Glamour' Photo Shoot - Lucy
Username:tonyjonesphotos tonyjonesphotos
Uploaded:13 Sep 2012 - 11:10 AM
Tags:Black & white, Flash / lighting, Portraits / people
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mikejmb
mikejmb  6 United Kingdom
13 Sep 2012 - 11:53 AM

Beautiful image and perfect in Black & White.

Mike

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NEWMANP
NEWMANP e2 Member 61587 forum postsNEWMANP vcard United Kingdom574 Constructive Critique Points
13 Sep 2012 - 12:42 PM

I like this one a lot, its my sort of portrait, nice eyes and expression and a fresh tight viewpoint.

its a good conversion too. just a couple of tiny things , the highlight on the left is a tad bright and id have liked to see the rest of the necklace (if it was a short one). maybe a highlight to many in the eyes but these are all tiny things on a super portrait

Phil

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alistairfarrugia
alistairfarrugia Critique Team 2164 forum posts Malta88 Constructive Critique Points
13 Sep 2012 - 1:02 PM

First off - it's a nice picture that shows the relative calm and confidence of the bride/model that posed in the shot. I like that. Now for the critique.

I would maybe crop this a bit tigher to try place the eyes in the top-right crossing point (of rule of thirds lines). This would then show some empty space in the picture only to the left of the face, which is where the model seems to be looking at. I think placing the face bang in the middle detracts a bit from the image's quality, artistically speaking.

Moreover, and if possible, try and avoid a background with very clear hard lines, both vertically and horizontally. Was this taken in a relatively dark church or hall with long windows? I can see a number of reflections in the model's eyes, and her pupils are wide-open (typical of a dark environment).

There is some loss in detail in the hair, and if you want to go for "The Artist" style, that detail is best recovered, as details in the model's hairstyle are critical visual elements that should help elicit an association to 1920s/1930s attire and hairstyles. Can you recover some details from the shadows using your RAW file?

I uploaded a modification using the very basic Microsoft Office Picture Manager. Added a sepia-ish tone to it to distinguish it from the original upload a bit more, whilst still retaining the "old-look" feel.

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banehawi
banehawi Critique Team 10868 forum postsbanehawi vcard Canada2866 Constructive Critique Points
13 Sep 2012 - 2:40 PM

Beautiful, very classy.


Alistairs crop will work if you are printing 10 x 8



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Last Modified By banehawi at 13 Sep 2012 - 2:43 PM

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tonyjonesphotos

Hi Alaister & Phil,

Many thanks for the critique.

The photo shoot was in the Dominion Theatre in London and this has a 1920's foyer where this shoot was taken. If you know the theatre, this shoot was taken on the balcony over the central foyer which was quite dark and was lit with a SB900 flash to camera left approx. 2' above model and diffused with a shoot through umbrella.

I know what you mean about placement in the rule of thirds and a closer crop may be better but personally, I liked the verticals to the rear as it creates some extra interest and as the shot was on a very low f-number, this would be blurred.

There is another shot in my portfolio showing Jenilee, another model, which gives you an idea of the venue and also, of the colour cast being generated by the walls and ceiling! Golden is an understatement!

I like the sepia tone that you used but I rarely use toning (personal choice!) although this image would indeed suit a muted tone. Think I might just send this one back to Lightroom at some point!! Smile

Phil, the highlights in the eyes were caused by 1 flash and 2 x foyer lights which the flash accentuated!

\i think I could have tidied up the loose hair strands too with more time!

Last Modified By tonyjonesphotos at 13 Sep 2012 - 2:47 PM

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paulbroad
paulbroad  781 forum posts United Kingdom851 Constructive Critique Points
13 Sep 2012 - 3:39 PM

This is a fine well produced image. I would simply leave it alone and leave the copyright off in a critique situation.

Paul

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Bubblefaery
13 Sep 2012 - 4:37 PM

Beautiful x

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Philo
Philo e2 Member 472 forum postsPhilo vcard England83 Constructive Critique Points
13 Sep 2012 - 4:50 PM

A superb portrait that works great in mono.
I wonder if the loss in hair detail is due to your conversion, maybe you could check the original colour. Could you have selected a faster shutter speed to reduce the ambient light in the background; this may have dealt with those bright highlights either side of her head. I think I would clone out the extra catchlights.
Phil

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miptog
miptog  83532 forum posts United Kingdom61 Constructive Critique Points
13 Sep 2012 - 10:18 PM

Like the shot a lot. May try and soften or clone out the dark patches on the diagonal 1/3 from the bottom of the frame.

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Jestertheclown
14 Sep 2012 - 9:57 AM

As Paul has said, leave it alone.

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Focus_Man
Focus_Man  4481 forum posts United Kingdom631 Constructive Critique Points
15 Sep 2012 - 11:00 AM

This is a nice picture, but where critique is concerned, like Jester and Paul before him, I would lose the logo.

Frank

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