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This was taken at a department trip to Stokes Bay a few weeks ago.

With this, I wanted to capture Jody and Ty's moment with their little boy, with the sea in the background. I wanted the main focus to be the family, but I also wanted to have some sort of landscape in the background to break up the blue sea a bit!

Brand:Sony
Camera:Sony A350
Recording media:JPEG (digital)
Date Taken:17 Mar 2014 - 2:34 PM
Focal Length:85mm
Lens Max Aperture:f/5.0
Aperture:f/9.0
Shutter Speed:1/400sec
Exposure Comp:0.0
ISO:100
Exposure Mode:Landscape
Metering Mode:Multi-segment
Flash:Off, Did not fire
White Balance:Auto
Title:Family trip to the beach
Username:remos08 remos08
Uploaded:2 Sep 2014 - 5:41 PM
Tags:Portraits / people, Seaside
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dudler
dudler Critique Team 11103 forum postsdudler vcard England312 Constructive Critique Points
2 Sep 2014 - 5:46 PM

I can see the thinking here, but I think a tighter crop will work just as well. Mod coming.

The big issue is a tilted horizon - all that water sloshing out into your computer... Seriously, seascapes are particularly exacting for this - you need it to be very close to perfect, or it simply looks wrong!

I also added a bit of oomph to the tones with Levels - midtones slider to the right a tad, and highlights slider a fraction to the left.

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mrswoolybill Critique Team 7435 forum postsmrswoolybill vcard United Kingdom1022 Constructive Critique Points
2 Sep 2014 - 6:23 PM

It's a delightful image, a magical moment of discovery; but oh dear that horizon! Water is the one thing that always lies straight, it really is important to check straightness as a routine part of your processing workflow.

However is the horizon actually necessary? It draws the eye to the top of the frame, when the interest is down at the bottom. I rather like the idea of the family looking out to a distance that has no limit or boundary.

The light was difficult, because the family's backs are largely in shadow. So a bit more brightness and contrast needed, but not a lot. I'll upload a Mod shortly.
Moira

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dark_lord Critique Team 101474 forum postsdark_lord vcard England130 Constructive Critique Points
2 Sep 2014 - 9:08 PM

I agree with what John and Moira have said. The rotation and crop have produced a stronger image.
I understand what you mean about including some of the landscape, but it doesn't add anything to the image that you'ce captured, it's all about the family at the sea.

If the landscape wasmore identifiable or had more interesting elements e.g. some boats or hills, then including it would help give a sense of place. as it is, the strip of land is quite non-descript (apologies to the locals, but at that size in the image it is quite featureless).

Keith

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banehawi
banehawi Critique Team 10867 forum postsbanehawi vcard Canada2866 Constructive Critique Points
2 Sep 2014 - 9:21 PM

You have to ask yourself why you didnt notice the off level horizon?

Im not being facetious, - its something you need to learn to do. I had to do it. I still do with my own images, - its so easy to miss things.

Anyway, you know it now, it need to be level.

Theres one other issue with it and thats white balance, Its way too blue, try setting it to the actual conditions, - her it was sunny, and you will get an image that looks more like mod2.

Its a keeper image for the family album I would think.


Regards


Willie

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remos08
remos08 New Member England
3 Sep 2014 - 6:31 PM

I definitely need some practice with keeping the water straight! My weekend work sorted there I think!

Thanks for all your help and mods, now that you've mentioned it I see what you all mean about the horizon not adding to it, the tighter crops look a lot better.

Thanks everyone!
Becca

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dudler
dudler Critique Team 11103 forum postsdudler vcard England312 Constructive Critique Points
3 Sep 2014 - 10:10 PM

Becca -

You can get spirit levels to go on top of a camera, and soem of the latest bodies incorporate electronic levels. Even then, you may not get it quite perfect - but it's simple to rotate and crop in editing!

Thankfully...

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