Ferraria Crispa

Hermanus (e2 Member)

5 Dec 2012 - 1:47 PM

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What an amazing flower !! Very well captured !! Excellent

pamelajean (Critique Team)

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5 Dec 2012 - 6:48 PM

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Also known as the "Starfish Iris", and what a beauty Averil, I've never seen one.
From the deep shadow, I assume the light was overhead and bright, and so you have done well with the exposure, keeping good whites and good detail on the intricacies of the flower. I love the sparkle you have on the petals.
You have space on the right, behind the flower, whereas it is best to have space in front of your subject, if indeed you want space anywhere around your flower. Treating your flower as if it were a person, animal or insect, the space would be in the area into which it is looking or facing.
I see you have taken this at an angle, and you were probably considering the best angle you could get on the bloom itself. There are some dark shadows on the right which are a bit distracting (one of them looks like the silhouette of a golfer teeing off).
In my modification, I removed the leaves and shadows from the right side, then mirrored the image so that the flower is facing to the right, cropped to square, and added canvas to the top, where you clipped the top petal. Because we read from left to right we also look at an image from left to right, and flowers tend to look better facing to the right, although it certainly isn't a hard and fast rule.
I then removed the little dark shadow on the bottom leaf, adjusted levels and sharpened.
Pamela.

paulbroad

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6 Dec 2012 - 9:01 AM

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Nice try and interesting. The bloom needed to be on the right side of the frame and the lighting is too harsh. About one stop less exposure needed. Dial in -1 on the exposure compensation screen.

Paul