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this is my first ever serious attempt at shooting a model so be gentle with me Wink
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Camera:5dMKII
Lens:70-200
Recording media:JPEG (digital)
Title:first ever modle shot
Username:steve_kershaw steve_kershaw
Uploaded:13 Feb 2009 - 6:30 PM
Tags:Portraits / people
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davidbailie
davidbailie e2 Member 10442 forum postsdavidbailie vcard United Kingdom5 Constructive Critique Points
13 Feb 2009 - 6:41 PMConstructive Critique!This comment was flagged as constructive critique! 

gentle - dunno what it means Wink

BUT

1 - Modle is spelt model (I hope Smile )

2 - really odd hand cut off - the hand is fundamental to the shot but it's lopped off ??

3 - her eyes are not on the same plain as the butterfly - at least to my eyes -(argue mine are wonky if you like)

4 - bit bleached on the right ??

- else ---- keep going Smile

db

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CathyT
CathyT e2 Member 87271 forum postsCathyT vcard United Kingdom18 Constructive Critique Points
13 Feb 2009 - 7:23 PM

Good first attempt......the skin's a bit hot...I've done a couple of mods .

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webjam
webjam  9292 forum posts Netherlands11 Constructive Critique Points
13 Feb 2009 - 7:26 PMConstructive Critique!This comment was flagged as constructive critique! 

The lighting seems a bit too much - highlights are blown out on the right hand side of the face.
I also did a course on portrait photography and 'learned' that all I had to do to change this is to put the lights further away from the model....(and I was thinking that a lot of technical stuff was involved to get the lighting right: it al comes to just moving these lights!)

One teacher set up a mannequin bust (from a shop window) and let us take pictures while he moved the lights around. Back home I could compare the shots and see how much changes while only the lights were moved closer, away and the angle changed.

And start shooting in RAW! That will give you more room to play with the exposures after the model left.
Getting the skintone right is an art on its own, I guess. So that means going back to the trial and error method Smile.

In your image, placing the butterfly a bit higher will solve the problem with the eyes. Move the lights a bit away to solve the blown out skin (check the Levels histogram after the first shots).

I think the eyes of the model are very well captured, with just enough light, very beautiful.

Hope this helps a bit...
Jacqueline

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steve_kershaw
13 Feb 2009 - 7:41 PM

wow thanks for the help all

the highlights where blown out in post, it was the high key look i was going for, though I do like cathy's mods,

I had the butterfly in line with the eyes, but had it flying away from the model, In changing it round I have missed realigning it

the hand looked to large for the shot, so I cropped in to reduce the impact, has this spoilt it

thx again for the comments they really do help
Steve

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Coleslaw
Coleslaw e2 Member 913403 forum postsColeslaw vcard Wales28 Constructive Critique Points
13 Feb 2009 - 7:45 PM


Quote: the hand looked to large for the shot

I was going to say that....Smile

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stolzy
stolzy  83753 forum posts7 Constructive Critique Points
13 Feb 2009 - 11:35 PMConstructive Critique!This comment was flagged as constructive critique! 

Agree with all of the above, but you still attempted and achieved more than most people do their first time with a model.
I see your point about the high-key, but its probably better not to blow the highlights in important areas even in high key shots.
Nice model btw - good bones and eyes.

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nicletog
nicletog  6 Spain
14 Feb 2009 - 12:12 PM

very nice but i like the new pic better and love yhe butterfly

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