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After advice please,i would like to start taking more pictures working with models,could you tell me doe this work
does it not work please be honest

Thanks,Ian

Brand:NIKON CORPORATION
Camera:Nikon D3000 Check out Nikon Nation!
Lens:55-200mm f/4-5.6 G VR
Recording media:JPEG (digital)
Date Taken:7 Jan 2010 - 11:53 AM
Focal Length:85mm
Lens Max Aperture:f/4.3
Aperture:f/8.0
Shutter Speed:1/125sec
Exposure Comp:0.0
ISO:100
Exposure Mode:Manual
Metering Mode:Multi-segment
Flash:No Flash
Title:Holly
Username:Ian White Ian White
Uploaded:5 Jun 2012 - 4:18 PM
Tags:Portraits / people
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arhab
arhab e2 Member 243 forum postsarhab vcard Indonesia2 Constructive Critique Points
5 Jun 2012 - 7:57 PM

needs more lighT in the face in my opinion. and she doesn't look natural maybe nervous or something, a smile will be great.

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Jestertheclown

Fill-flash would have done the trick here methinks.
A check using levels tells me the image is somewhat underexposed. The histogram doesn't nearly reach the RHS. Also, it looks slightly yellow.
All that I've done in my mod. is to open it in Lightroom and adjust the W/B, increase the exposure and apply some fill in light. No multiple layers or masks, just a straightforward adjustment.
I suppose that I could have sharpened it by a tiny amount too.
Hope this helps.

Bren.

Last Modified By Jestertheclown at 5 Jun 2012 - 9:25 PM

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banehawi Critique Team 10988 forum postsbanehawi vcard Canada2984 Constructive Critique Points
5 Jun 2012 - 10:30 PMConstructive Critique!This comment was flagged as constructive critique! 

Hi Ian.

The shot is lit evenly from both sides apparently, - a fairly flat light. Nothing much wrong with this, but its nice of you can explain how you set the shot up.

You used a manual exposure, f/8 at 1/125. This has resulted in an underexposed image. make it a habit to check your histogram on your LCD right after a shot, so you can identify exposure issues, then compensate and shoot again.

This is the biggest issue from an exposure point of view.


The models pose is a little dull, - she could smile a little more and engage the camera better.

There is an area at the top of her forehead by her hairline where she has net applied make-up, and its visible quite easily, so more care has to be taken.

White balance is likely not calibrated, and her skin tone is a little off for me. I have loaded a mod with these tweaks applied. Ive also cropped to place her eye on a third, and tilted the image, - the model can do this, it looks more appealing.


the large catch lights in her eyes are a bit of a distraction for me, - many folks wont mind them, but I have re worked them in the mod. Last adjustment was a little sharpening of ger eyes.





Hope this helps.




regards



Willie

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paulbroad e2 Member 789 forum postspaulbroad vcard United Kingdom880 Constructive Critique Points
6 Jun 2012 - 7:53 AM

Willie covers it. The lighting is flat with no modelling and you do not tell us what you used. There is some under exposure and you need to get that right before anything else. This type of formal portrait is better with a 3/4 head pose rather than near full on and she does look rather bored. A pretty girl needs an expression which the viewer can appreciate.

Talk to her, get her laughing and taking part in the session. Get her to enjoy the experience - it will show in the image. If you used natural light, then flash fill on camera will lift things, but will still look contrived. You need a main light at about 45 degrees and raised to look down slightly, then a reflector or half power second light on the opposing side to balance shadows.

Once you get a basic technique sorted, then you add and move lights about. The best way to practice portraiture is outdoors at a nice setting with cloudy/bright lighting - not bright sun.

Paul

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Lynamick e2 Member 12Lynamick vcard United Kingdom31 Constructive Critique Points
6 Jun 2012 - 9:07 AMConstructive Critique!This comment was flagged as constructive critique! 

"Talk to her, get her laughing and taking part in the session. Get her to enjoy the experience - it will show in the image."
Hi,
Paul is dead right, if you are going to start using models then you need to become a chat-up merchant as well as a photographer. You model is in front of your camera with light shining in her face while you fiddle about with your equipment. If you do not talk to her then she will start to feel uncomtable and start getting agitated. All this will lower the quallity of the final image. A one to one photo session can be a bit intense for an amature model, it may help if she has a friend with her that way she could relax and enjoy the shoot.
Hope this helps.
Michael

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Robert51 e2 Member 6Robert51 vcard United Kingdom14 Constructive Critique Points
7 Jun 2012 - 3:05 PM

Hi Ian

I don't think your that far off and the more you do it the easier it becomes. You will also make the model feel more at ease and insure you keep talking to them while giving them clear instructions on what you want. I also feel this is the only you can develop your own style.

I have uploaded a mod and hope you like it.

Robert

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