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If anyone can advise on how to inprove on this image, or tell me were I am going wrong.
It was a sheet over the door job and a Sony dslr a100, kit lens, focal length 70.0mm,exposure 1/125, aperture f/5-6, iso 400, flash, metering mode matrix.
I think it's not too bad for a first time at people photography, but I know it could be better.

Camera:Sony a-100
Lens:Kit Lens
Recording media:JPEG (digital)
Title:hurry up and take it pleaseeee.
Username:rayjac rayjac
Uploaded:29 Sep 2010 - 8:22 PM
Tags:Portraits / people
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DRicherby
DRicherby  5269 forum posts United Kingdom725 Constructive Critique Points
29 Sep 2010 - 9:29 PM

Cool ear-rings! Grin

You have good eye contact here and nice catchlights in the eyes. I like the off-centre pose, too, but I think your model ought to be a bit bigger in the frame. I see two problems: exposure and the background.

The photo is significantly under-exposed. The histogram stops at 75% brightness, where 0% is pure black and 100% is pure white. Check the histogram on the back of the camera after you shoot: for most scenes, the graph should reach right the way across the scale, without bunching up at either end. (Exceptions are when you're photographing something very dark or very bright, where the full range of brightness isn't present in the scene so shouldn't be in your photograph, either.) If the histogram doesn't come close to the right-hand edge, you're under-exposing so increase the exposure and try again until you're filling most of the scale.

The background is plain but it's messy. Iron your sheet and hang it so it doesn't crease. Increasing the distance between your model and the sheet will throw it at least somewhat out of focus so its texture won't show up as much.

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paulbroad
paulbroad  681 forum posts United Kingdom825 Constructive Critique Points
30 Sep 2010 - 8:41 AM

All said above, plus the obvious one that your title suggests - she looks pleasant, but not entirely happy. The mods both improve the image dramatically, but for very basic portraiture, you are often better outdoor where people relax more and easy backgrounds are available.

However, the main problem to master is exposure, and regularly checking your LCD is one of the great advantages that the digital SLR has over film.

paul

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Sooty_1
Sooty_1 Critique Team 31125 forum posts United Kingdom192 Constructive Critique Points
30 Sep 2010 - 9:44 PM

Yep, as noted above, move the model away from the background, and try to get the background smooth.
You need at least a stop more exposure, and preferably diffuse the flash which will be more flattering to the model.

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NeilWigan
NeilWigan e2 Member 3NeilWigan vcard England15 Constructive Critique Points
6 Oct 2010 - 10:07 AM

hello not heard from you for some days hope all ok.

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sparrowhawk e2 Member 5250 forum postssparrowhawk vcard United Kingdom2 Constructive Critique Points
11 Oct 2010 - 1:10 PM

i agree with the above comments but anther one i would like to add is have fun with your models by talking to them and getting them to laugh ! a relaxed model is a happy model, love shot keep at it

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