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Hi, this is a re-up of one from a while ago

I really like the picture and I wanted to do something with it and actually get it printed

I was looking for some advice on composition, I have also tried it landscape but this here is closer to the original size so would appreciate any feedback on that.

Of course any feedback at all on the pic will be helpful, I know its quite white and bright which I like but not sure whether anyone else will or what else I could do with it - I'm hoping some fresh eyes can give inspiration

Thanks

Brand:Canon
Camera:Canon EOS 450D
Lens:Nifty Fifty f1.8
Recording media:JPEG (digital)
Title:Jamie Boardwalk
Username:ubik ubik
Uploaded:8 Mar 2011 - 9:21 AM
Tags:Black & white, Portraits / people
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lianna
lianna  4 United Kingdom13 Constructive Critique Points
8 Mar 2011 - 10:00 AMConstructive Critique!This comment was flagged as constructive critique! 

Hi Chris...

I like the shot, and I can see why you would want it printed... A small person in the big wide world... I love the contrast of size and the space. I too like the white. Initally I was not sure, but having looked again, it works. If printing it off however, I think strengthening the blacks just to give it a bit more contrast and umph!!! If you see what I mean.

Composition wise I also think you have it pretty spot on. A good pov, good dof. Only thing I can suggest is a slight crop up from the bottom to rid some of the empty space!!!

But it will look good hanging up!!! A lovely moment captured Smile

X x x

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ubik
ubik  447 forum posts United Kingdom
8 Mar 2011 - 1:27 PM

hi Lianna

Thanks so much for taking the time, and I'm glad you like the picture.

I have got a voucher for a canvas, cheap, so that's the plan anyway

I also considered cropping it landscape and making Jamie a bit bigger in the picture but am not sure what to do now!

Do you think I should lose some floor or sky? (It needs to be less elongated anyway for the print)

Love your pics btw

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lianna
lianna  4 United Kingdom13 Constructive Critique Points
8 Mar 2011 - 5:30 PM

Hmm now that's the question... Gimme half hour to get home from work and il play with some mods for you if that's ok. I like the portrait so certainly stick with that. Initially I thought crop from the bottom, now I an wondering about sky down. Lemme see and il get back to you x x x

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ubik
ubik  447 forum posts United Kingdom
8 Mar 2011 - 5:37 PM

Thanks Lianna that would be great! - I like having him central so I can keep the converging diagonals of the boardwalk but I wonder if he should be on a 'third' somehow rather than so central

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banehawi
banehawi Critique Team 10868 forum postsbanehawi vcard Canada2867 Constructive Critique Points
8 Mar 2011 - 6:01 PMConstructive Critique!This comment was flagged as constructive critique! 

This is indeed a nice shot of a moment in time; it means a lot to a family to have such a nice shot, - and its probably typical of the behaviour of the little boy at the time.



I likey beat Lianna to mods as Im not at work, and I do agree with her comments.


I have loaded 2 mods; both are cropped into 8 X 10 formats for printing, and they place the boy ideally on a third; I have toned down dome of the reflected light from the boardwalk to show some deail, as well as giving both a little more contrast, - meaning black is black. Mod2, though its hardly noticeable in the upload, is a slight sepia toned version of Mod1, which is you original. Both mods are sharpened a little.


I will load a mod3 shortly leaving him central for comparison, with all the other adjustments applied, - then you decide yourself which is best.




Regards



Willie

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ubik
ubik  447 forum posts United Kingdom
8 Mar 2011 - 6:16 PM

Wow, Willie now I've seen it with him off centre I really love it.

My original has some toning added as I find straight black and white a bit harsh, but the stronger sepia really gives it a bit more warmth

Now I am in a quandary Smile

Also, do you think this will print okay onto a large canvas? The one I've got in mind is 24" x 32". I am probably pushing my luck with my 450d's meagre megapixel count

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lianna
lianna  4 United Kingdom13 Constructive Critique Points
8 Mar 2011 - 6:30 PM

Lol, damn Willie beat me to it.... good thing though as he is awesome with MODs...

Ok, so i have done a few, but near enough the same as what Willie has done for you... I am in two minds about the central view now, having seen the thirds comp... it works just as well as the central in my opinion... so go with which ever your heart sets on...

vouchers for canvas - bonus... if you ever want more done, ebay is very good (if you use it).. i have had some fantastic canvas's done via ebay...http://stores.ebay.co.uk/cool4cardsdesignandprint - this guy is great...

the shot will bring my joy and is a perfect family moment x x x

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ubik
ubik  447 forum posts United Kingdom
8 Mar 2011 - 6:37 PM

Thank you both ever so much, you've given me lots of ideas there

I will try and decide which one I like best and get the canvas ordered

Really appreciate your input

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NEWMANP e2 Member 61587 forum postsNEWMANP vcard United Kingdom574 Constructive Critique Points
8 Mar 2011 - 10:49 PMConstructive Critique!This comment was flagged as constructive critique! 

hi,
i dont mid high key at all and to be honest i could make 3 or 4 prints from this lovely subject.

the first thing that strikes me is that the fencing needs to be fairly flat and laking in contrast but the child needs to be high contrast.

i did one mod cropped to the horizontal because im uncertain that the huge amount of white negative space is doing anything but distracting attention from the child which should be dominant,

in the second mod, if i were staying vertical, id be cropping the right side and off the base to off centre the figure and strngthen the dynamic.

too many people are hungup on avoiding using the paper white in there image but this a cassic case where i feel it would be quite strong in print form.

i applaud the idea and have no real critisism at all , and the conversion i love but feel there is too much white about for the best result.

regards
Phil

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Jestertheclown
8 Mar 2011 - 11:06 PM

I'm not going to disagree with anything that's been posted here. It's all excellent advice.

For what it's worth, I'd go with Willie's "Mod3, - the original position with an 8 X 10 crop etc."

Simply because I like it the most.

But that's only my opinion, it's your call . . . !

Bren.

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ubik
ubik  447 forum posts United Kingdom
9 Mar 2011 - 9:47 AM

Hi everyone

Well its been a tough decision, but I went with banehawi's 1st/2nd Mod - I think possibly because it was a fresh look at the picture (which I took about 7 months ago) as I'd been so used to seeing it with him in the centre

I have uploaded my final pic as a mod, I don't think my paintshop skills are quite up to the right level yet and I wasn't sure how to do certain things that you mentioned - When I increased the contrast to make the figure darker the image seemed to lose some of its detail.

I managed to darken some of the tones and pick out some more detail on the floor, all in all I am quite happy with it just lacking the confidence in my own eye which is why I came to see what you guys in the know thought - But it seems I wasn't too far off the mark to begin with

Thanks to everyone for the inspiration, I hope my wife likes it and that it looks good on the wall Smile

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Quote: I hope my wife likes it and that it looks good on the wall

I can't see your wife not liking it and I reckon that it will look superb on the wall.

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banehawi
banehawi Critique Team 10868 forum postsbanehawi vcard Canada2867 Constructive Critique Points
9 Mar 2011 - 7:14 PM

Print it any size you like, - they can do magic at the printers!



Regards


Willie

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lianna
lianna  4 United Kingdom13 Constructive Critique Points
13 Mar 2011 - 10:21 AM

You have had some cracking advice.... I hope you get lots of joy from your canvas....

Regards

Lianna x x

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