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14 Nov 2010 - 6:45 PM

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Excellent image and the connection with the eyes has certainly been achieved but I wonder if she could have just swept her hair up above the left eye.
I have offered a mod with a slight crop and increased light.
Very good work and I hope this is of some use.
Phil

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paulbroad

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14 Nov 2010 - 7:00 PM

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It's nice, but to connect with the eyes you need a bit more of the light on her eyes. They are nice but a little in the shadow area. I would also crop tighter to the face and loose a lot of that shoulder - a large blank area.

Quality is very good.

Paul

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arhb (e2 Member)

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14 Nov 2010 - 10:15 PM

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Lovely portrait, and as has been mentioned, you've got the connection with her eyes.
I would have thought that F8 should be fine for head shots, but F10 looks just fine
I like your composition also, even though the subject is looking straightforward - the offset works.
The eyes need to be sharp which aids the connection, and I think they were a tad on the soft side, hence I did some light localised sharpening, both to the irises and lashes.
Brunettes with brown eyes and pale skin are quite challenging in getting the balance right in terms of exposure, and although the skin tones could have taken a bit more light, it's quite possible that the eyes would have still been on the under-exposed side, meaning some post-production to make the irises/eye-whites bright.
You can do this at the RAW stage, where you convert one RAW image for skin-tones, and convert one RAW image for correctly exposed eyes. You then blend the 2 in PS for correctly exposed skin and eyes. Worth it for a good image.
Final thought would be a hair-light camera right just to add some separation from the dark bg.

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banehawi (Critique Team)

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14 Nov 2010 - 10:36 PM

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A really nice sjot Pablo, lovely pose, great model ligting is very good. post processing and softening all done just right.

Some observations:

Although you have used a fairly small aperture, I thnk you have focused in front of the eyes, either on her hair, or mouth, as these areas are considerably sharper that her eyes. Did you select a single focus point with the camera and place it exactly on her right (left one in this shot) and then shoot? If not, then you need to do this.

The softening has drained a little colour from her skin, or you may have de saturated intentionally, - but Im assuming you didnt, so have adjusted skin tone in the mod.


Ive sharpened the eyes alone, and lightened the shadows slightly, while cropping space from the right and top to place her eyes on a third.


In mod2, I removed one of the two catchlights in the eyes to show a comparison, - some people prefer one catch light.


Hope this is helpful,



regards


Willie

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