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I have no experience in taking portraits, but my neighbour, Jenni, was off to a wedding recently, so I had to have a go as she looked so glamorous! This is the result (and she won't mind me saying, but air-brushed in Lightroom). I believe there should be no smiles - is that right? v2 is mono. It was taken outside in the shade. All critiques welcomed as this is my first attempt.
Apologies to whoever voted for Helichrysum, which will probably reappear shortly!
Ann

Brand:Canon
Camera:Canon EOS 400D
Lens:SIGMA 17-70mm Macro
Recording media:JPEG (digital)
Title:Jenni
Username:AnnChown AnnChown
Uploaded:29 Jul 2011 - 9:59 AM
Tags:Portraits / people
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franken
franken e2 Member 112922 forum postsfranken vcard Wales4 Constructive Critique Points
29 Jul 2011 - 10:21 AM

Colour one for me Ann - lovely portrait.


Ken

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29 Jul 2011 - 11:20 AMConstructive Critique!This comment was flagged as constructive critique! 

Yes diffidently the colour version is best, for some reason black and white suits male portraiture best.
I love the skin tones and the smile, nothing wrong in a smile when the lighting is soft. And her the lighting is near perfect giving wonderful modelling on your friend's face without any harsh shadows.
You could try upping the brightness just a smidgeon to make the picture a little more vibrant.

Very well done

Ken.

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woolybill1 e2 Member 7woolybill1 vcard United Kingdom65 Constructive Critique Points
29 Jul 2011 - 11:38 AM

Nothing wrong with smiles Smile especially when they're as unforced as this Smile
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Sooty_1 Critique Team 31125 forum posts United Kingdom192 Constructive Critique Points
29 Jul 2011 - 12:56 PMConstructive Critique!This comment was flagged as constructive critique! 

I like the picture - it's natural and unforced. Colour or black and white is good for portraits, but I would like to see her further away from the background. The texture detracts from the subject and her radiant smile.

Modelling is quite good, but a small reflector would have lightened the side of her face a little. Nitpicky, I know, and I expect you didn't have a chance to modify it, as you would have lost the spontanaity.

Nick

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banehawi Critique Team 9710 forum postsbanehawi vcard Canada2671 Constructive Critique Points
29 Jul 2011 - 4:29 PMConstructive Critique!This comment was flagged as constructive critique! 

This is a really good portrait, very good detail, and a smile makes it even better. The only time a smile is not allowed is in passports and official documents, - and as a photographer, you may want to convey a mood that requires the subject not to smile.

A reminder, - please provide all your exif data for shot settings when you upload for critique, this helps us provide better critiques.

Theres very little evidence if any airbrushing, so it is well done, or very little has been done.

There a couple of small issues that can improve this, some mentioned above.

Too close to the wall behind, - this renders the texture of the wall in detail where its better out of focus, so more space behind her. It also causes a shadow which you may want to avoid.

Its a little underexposed, probably due to the influence of the light coloured wall on the cameras meter, so beter if her fave is brighter.

her eyes are a little too dark, - and look better lighter with small catchlights. You can use you pop up flash, - raise it manulayy to provide fill flash, - will lighten the face also.

The amount of air brushing and softening effects can safely be increased.

The mono conversion looks quite flat, - try using the channel mixer and experiment with different amounts of the mixers colours for a beter effect.

Youve applied a vignette, which for me, doesnt work to enhance the image, - better without it.


Ive loaded 4 mods for comparison. 1 is the orginal brightened, eyes brighter with catchlights, and the wall blurred; 2 is the same with more air brishing applied; 3 is the same with a diffuse gow softening effect applied, and 4 is a toned mono.



Hope this is helpful, and that you like the mods,



Regards


Willie

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MikeGreaves
29 Jul 2011 - 10:19 PM

Wow, a very striking portrait, I bet that she was pleased with it Smile
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