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This is the Snowdon Mountain Railway on it's slow ascent to the top.

I was taking shots of the landscape and spotted the train chugging it's way up the mountain.

I zoomed in to isolate the red train against it's green/brown background.

I do have some shots of the little train in a wider setting, but it seems lost in the landscape.

I thought this composition would have more impact and would be a little different.

I'd love to know your opinions and if you like this shot.

Thanks

Elaine

Brand:NIKON CORPORATION
Camera:Nikon D3100 Check out Nikon Nation!
Lens:70.0-300.0 mm f/4.0-5.6
Recording media:RAW (digital)
Date Taken:27 Mar 2012 - 2:27 PM
Focal Length:300mm
Lens Max Aperture:f/5.7
Aperture:f/13.0
Shutter Speed:1/640sec
Exposure Comp:-1.0
ISO:200
Exposure Mode:Aperture-priority AE
Metering Mode:Multi-segment
Flash:No Flash
Title:Journey to the Top
Username:WeeGeordieLass WeeGeordieLass
Uploaded:5 Apr 2012 - 8:15 PM
Tags:Landscape / travel
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Jestertheclown

Hi Elaine,
I do like it and my first though was that I could envisage it very large on a wall somewhere. A waiting room perhaps.
I imagine that I'd also like the wider version that you refer to as leaving the train a bit lost, although I think that you're right to have elected to go with this one to upload to here.
As for the image itself, it's acceptably sharp, such as you can see of it on here, the colours do it justice and the composition won't offend anyone, so I'd say you're on to a winner!
One thing that I would change though, is the border. Personally, I don't like borders of any kind. That's just me, of course but I think that others will also see this one as being a bit heavy handed.
Hope this helps.
Bren.

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janeez
janeez e2 Member 61195 forum postsjaneez vcard United Kingdom8 Constructive Critique Points
5 Apr 2012 - 9:07 PM

It would be interesting to see the train in a much larger setting. This would provide scale and put the train in it's correct setting on a mountainside. With this image it looks like the train is going downhill due to the engine being at the back. With this in mind I would have more to the front of the engine rather than what looks like the rear. It is a nice simple image that doesn't need to much done in the way of editing. I like the addition of a border it holds it together nicely.Smile

Jane

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janeez e2 Member 61195 forum postsjaneez vcard United Kingdom8 Constructive Critique Points
5 Apr 2012 - 9:10 PM


Quote: Personally, I don't like borders of any kind.

Grin


Quote: I like the addition of a border it holds it together nicely

Grin The black may be a little heavy but the white edge is good

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Jestertheclown

. . . horses for courses!

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WeeGeordieLass e2 Member 2343 forum postsWeeGeordieLass vcard England
5 Apr 2012 - 9:57 PM

Hi Bren & Jane,

Thanks for your comments and advice.

As you both mentioned that you'd like to see the train in it's wider setting I've uploaded another version (this is the jpeg - I haven't processed the RAW file yet).

I wondered what you thought of the composition of this second version. I didn't think the train was in a good position so that's why I concentrated on the zoomed in version.

If you think the second, wider version is better I'll spend some time on the processing of that one.

I never know how much/little or what colours to use for borders - I always seem to get it wrong!

Thanks for your advice - I'm grateful.

Cheers

Elaine

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Jestertheclown
5 Apr 2012 - 10:15 PM

Hi again.
That large version's quite spectacular but as we both thought, the train does get a little lost.
I think that if you were to crop some from the bottom and the RHS, where there's the least interest, you'd end up with a better composition and you'll be left with a wonderful landscape behind your train which then becomes a focal point to catch your attention.
I think that for this to work properly though, it needs to be seen large.
And I mean LARGE.
Barn door large!
Otherwise, the train won't be distinguishable as a train and the whole point of the exercise will be lost.
I'd like to know what the others have to say and I shall be very interested to see which way you go with this.
I'm sure you'll be letting us know!

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janeez e2 Member 61195 forum postsjaneez vcard United Kingdom8 Constructive Critique Points
5 Apr 2012 - 10:54 PM

Agree with Bren. A bit off the bottom and a bit off the RHS. That trains gotta go somewhere so send it on its way down the mountainside! We read pictures from right to left so I may have a little play with this one as well. Smile

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janeez e2 Member 61195 forum postsjaneez vcard United Kingdom8 Constructive Critique Points
5 Apr 2012 - 11:10 PM

I have added a new mod. You have definitely given more sense of scale with this one and the train takes you into the image. If you can make this a large picture it could look pretty impressive.

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5 Apr 2012 - 11:26 PM

I like the mod. janeez but I wouldn't flip it over.
I'd rather see it as it really is.
Just my opinion.

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WeeGeordieLass e2 Member 2343 forum postsWeeGeordieLass vcard England
7 Apr 2012 - 2:53 AM

Hi Jane

Thanks for the mod.

I'll do some work on the wider version 2.

Your crop looks good. Seeing it now, after the work you've done on it - it does look like this version has potential.

Thanks for your time and advice.

Cheers

Elaine

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