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Surrounded by yellow fields every spring its difficult to resist trying to make something of them.

Brand:Panasonic
Camera:Panasonic Lumix DMC-FZ200
Lens:Leica DC VARIO ELMAR 1:3.3-4.9/4.7-47 ASPH.
Recording media:JPEG (digital)
Date Taken:30 Apr 2014 - 9:41 AM
Focal Length:20.9mm
Lens Max Aperture:f/2.8
Aperture:f/5.0
Shutter Speed:1/400sec
Exposure Comp:0.0
ISO:100
Exposure Mode:Manual
Metering Mode:Multi-segment
Flash:Off, Did not fire
White Balance:Auto
Title:Just another yellow field.
Username:Paulbee Paulbee
Uploaded:19 Jun 2014 - 11:43 AM
Tags:Field path, Landscape / travel, Perspective, Rapeseed, Walks, Yellow fields
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IshanPathak
IshanPathak e2 Member 57 forum postsIshanPathak vcard India10 Constructive Critique Points
19 Jun 2014 - 12:48 PMConstructive Critique!This comment was flagged as constructive critique! 

A Lovely shot.

The yellow fields look over sharpened, and has lost its natural look. ( Personal opinion )

Also, if possible, i would have preferred a straighter alignment.

I would have took 2 steps to my right, and would have told the person to walk just a bit towards the left, instraight to that narrow gap.

Ishan

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mikbee
mikbee e2 Member 7mikbee vcard Scotland7 Constructive Critique Points
19 Jun 2014 - 3:21 PM

Good colours Paul.
And as you have this for a critique,
all I can say is perhaps the figure is a bit too central in the frame !!
Mick.

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mrswoolybill Critique Team 7395 forum postsmrswoolybill vcard United Kingdom971 Constructive Critique Points
19 Jun 2014 - 5:11 PMConstructive Critique!This comment was flagged as constructive critique! 

First of all the things that work for me. The dark blue clothing complements the yellow flowers perfectly, the figure is good and sharp, and there's a nice sense of movement in the feet - the raised foot is particularly effective. There's a path to explore, it leads into the distance and it follows a diagonal which is good.

There are two very interesting suggestions above, and really they are part and parcel of the same question - the composition isn't really satisfactory. The path heads away to the left, the figure seems to be moving straight forward and the focal point in the distance is the detail top right. So the viewer isn't really sure which way to explore the frame.

Ishan's Modification removes the distractions on the 'horizon' at the top of the frame and focuses attention better on the figure. Mick;'s comment about central placement is also apt though - placing your subject in the middle of the frame tends to give a static, fixed feel. Movement is conveyed better by a subject on one side, moving into the frame.

As Mick says, stepping a couple of steps to the right would have given you a better composition. A crop can address that to some extent.

In the West, because we read (images as well as text) from left to right we expect to see movement happening in that direction. So I would also try flipping this horizontally.

Finally I suspect that this is slightly underexposed, it looks a wee bit dull and flat on the yellow flowers. I'd like to see more of a citrus zing there. A simple Levels adjustment should sort that.

Modification to follow, I hope...
Moira

Last Modified By mrswoolybill at 19 Jun 2014 - 5:14 PM

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paulbroad
paulbroad  681 forum posts United Kingdom843 Constructive Critique Points
19 Jun 2014 - 8:21 PM

Well done in general. So much Rapeseed this year. Not good for the hay fever sufferer. I would crop the horizon down to the top of the flowers and go for a more off centre composition. The classic Rape field shot has the model wearing red, the strongest possible colour to go with all that yelliw.

Paul

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pamelajean
pamelajean Critique Team 8752 forum postspamelajean vcard United Kingdom1578 Constructive Critique Points
19 Jun 2014 - 11:52 PMConstructive Critique!This comment was flagged as constructive critique! 

My first thought was to remove the bit at the top and just have the frame filled with the rape, and I see that this has already been suggested above.

So I have done a simple modification with the rape extended upwards.
I cropped square and placed the figure two thirds across the frame.
You may feel that it's now too simple, just the figure and the field, but sometimes less is more.
I also cloned out the bottom of the white shirt that shows beneath the jacket line, as my eye kept being drawn to it.

Pamela.

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banehawi
banehawi Critique Team 10781 forum postsbanehawi vcard Canada2800 Constructive Critique Points
20 Jun 2014 - 2:06 AMConstructive Critique!This comment was flagged as constructive critique! 

A nice shot.

Uploaded a mod; its quite similar to Ishans actually apart from the crop. Its a 10 X 8; colour temp is warmer; yellow saturation is lower.


Regards


Willie

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Paulbee
Paulbee e2 Member 935 forum postsPaulbee vcard United Kingdom
20 Jun 2014 - 9:31 AM

Thanks foe the Mods everybody. The foreground flowers were sharpened in High Pass. I agree losing the horizon is an improvement. My own main criticism is that the ground was too flat to give a good perspective of the path . Ideally I would like to have been ten feet up in the air on a ladder to take this pic!

Regards Paul.

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dudler
dudler Critique Team 1092 forum postsdudler vcard England261 Constructive Critique Points
20 Jun 2014 - 7:41 PM

Yes, i agree: the composition could live with some zapping up.

My own thought is move left, and get the path, the endge of the field and the foreground into a strong zig-zag.

My crop may suggest the sort of thing, I hope.

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