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Taken at Lindean near Galashiels

Recording media:RAW (digital)
Title:Lindean Swans
Username:barral barral
Uploaded:14 Aug 2009 - 11:20 PM
Tags:Black & white, Landscape / travel
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somnathchatterjee
15 Aug 2009 - 5:06 AMConstructive Critique!This comment was flagged as constructive critique! 

excellent capture barral. but as you have sent it to the critique gallery i must say everything is good in this image except the placement of the tree at the middle of the frame. it is creating a bit obstruction. According to my point of view, if you had placed the tree at the left side of the image and the swans at the right giving a complete view of the fog, lake, other trees etc. at the middle, it would have been better with a decent balance. but in that case also it would not have been a portrait of swans as your title suggests rather it would have been a landscape picture as you have presented here. if possible always select a proper title because it has some bearing with the image itself. but you have created a fantastic mood here with this image.

Hope it helps,
somnath

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JBA
JBA  5341 forum posts United Kingdom1 Constructive Critique Points
15 Aug 2009 - 8:51 AM

I like the mood but my eye isn't held in by anything at the top. Maybe a vignette, if that isn't too obvious. ( maybe a black background, but that may not be possible for a non member ) The tree in the middle is so definite as an artistic decision that you must really want it there. It doesn't bother me as I like the way it divides the frame. Daft, I know, but it might be a more direct statement without the swans. The picture isn't about them particularly. Hmm, that may be rubbish, dunno. I get the impression you know what you are after so don't be put off by lack of votes etc.
Jon

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barral
barral  10 United Kingdom
15 Aug 2009 - 9:03 AM

Thanks Somnath.

I did take a few images with tree at various points and without it. I'm a bit O' a rebel as I like to break the rule of thirds now and again and place my main part of the image bang in the middle.
I'd like to think that because the tree is so prominent and the picture seems like a contrsty image of a tree it then invites the viewer to explore what's behind the tree a little more than if it'd just been at the side or not in it atall. Mabey I'm asking to much of the viewer. I don't really put a lot of thought into my titles and would prefer not to name them.

Thanks again Somnath

Barrie

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barral
barral  10 United Kingdom
15 Aug 2009 - 9:05 AM

Hi Jon

You posted your comment as I was writing.

You're almost bang on, I think Wink

Regards

Barrie

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borrower
borrower  4 England
17 Aug 2009 - 1:08 PM

I'M NO EXPERT JUST A BEGINNER, BUT I LIKE THE SHOT, ITS MISTY AND MOODY WOULD NOT BE THE SAME IN COLOUR. ITS LIKE THE OPENING SHOT IN A B & W FILM... CHEERS LOUISE

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barral
barral  10 United Kingdom
24 Aug 2009 - 9:18 PM

Thanks all for your comments

And Louise thanks for that. If you keep staring at it something may happen (whilst drinkin a bottle o' whiskey) ;0

Barrie

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