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My first attemp at a self portrait, not enterly sure about it, all comments much appreciated
Thank you for looking Smile

Recording media:JPEG (digital)
Title:Me,myself and I
Username:Joscelyne Joscelyne
Uploaded:17 Nov 2009 - 5:18 PM
Tags:Portraits / people
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johnnyboy114
johnnyboy114 e2 Member 6231 forum postsjohnnyboy114 vcard United Kingdom106 Constructive Critique Points
17 Nov 2009 - 5:32 PMConstructive Critique!This comment was flagged as constructive critique! 

Ok, I don't want to sound like I am ripping this apart, but I would like to add my hopefully constructive criticism if thats Ok?

Firstly, I think I can see what you were trying to achieve. Problem is there are two major flaws (unless of course it was the look you were going for) and that is that there is not only a lack of focus in what might be seen as the correct areas (eyes, front of face) but there is movement in it too, making it less sharp.

Have another go, maybe get the glare from the flash to be less harsh by diffusing somehow. And for focus, I tend to mark somewhere where I know my eyes are going to be in the image, then put myself in that position, so I know that the eyes will be in focus.

Also, the hat is quite an integral part of this image I would suspect, yet you can see nothing of it. I would be tempted to pull out the shot a little so you get a little more of the hat. If you weren't wearing one, then fair enough, you could get away with a crop that tight. But what would be the point of putting a prop in an image if you aren't actually going to see it.

I hope you don't take this too badly, but the idea is a good one. Just a few tweaks and a re-try and I reckon you're on to something. Hope this helps?

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Joscelyne
Joscelyne e2 Member 5Joscelyne vcard Scotland
17 Nov 2009 - 5:37 PM

Thank you for your comment, i will take it on board, i need to work on getting it in focus next time Tongue,

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