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Dear Curator,
This picture is a part of last week uploaded,model photography.
I try to lightup the gown more stronger and also by using the single lighting to create the dark back ground to keep the subjeck is isolated.

to Critique TEAM,
please critique the composition and lighting .........
Thanks and Rgds

Brand:Canon
Camera:Canon EOS 1D X
Lens:24.0 - 70.0 mm (35 mm equivalent: 23.2 - 67.7 mm)
Recording media:JPEG (digital)
Date Taken:12 Jan 2014 - 12:37 PM
Focal Length:70mm
Aperture:f/10.0
Shutter Speed:1/160sec
Exposure Comp:0.0
ISO:500
Exposure Mode:Manual
Metering Mode:Partial
Flash:On, Fired
White Balance:Auto
Title:Model Photography [02]
Username:WimpyIskandar WimpyIskandar
Uploaded:15 Jan 2014 - 3:40 AM
Tags:Portrait/people, Portraits / people
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handlerstudio
handlerstudio e2 Member 1handlerstudio vcard United States5 Constructive Critique Points
15 Jan 2014 - 4:03 AM

That is quite an outfit!

Peter

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WimpyIskandar
WimpyIskandar e2 Member 3WimpyIskandar vcard Indonesia
15 Jan 2014 - 4:25 AM

Dear Peter,wow,should i open a shop selling outfit with her.......??? anyway,Thnks for your comment.
Best Rgds WIMPY.

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paulbroad
paulbroad  681 forum posts United Kingdom825 Constructive Critique Points
15 Jan 2014 - 9:18 AM

Decent shot but the face needs more light. I see you used flash, but there is no sign of it, and I would have thought it would carry with a 70mm setting at ISO500.

The main problem for me is that she is almost certainly posing for, or looking at someone else. The whole pose suggests that. You needed eye contact. In these situations, shout, wave your hand, do something to attract her attention, but be ready to grab two or three shots quickly.

Paul

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WimpyIskandar e2 Member 3WimpyIskandar vcard Indonesia
15 Jan 2014 - 9:28 AM

Dear PAUL,
Noted mssg.some another photo is with eye contact,the flash as you describe is no sign of it,i use the monopodstick and could be the posisition is not corretcly synchron with me,it is handle by my assistant between the crowd............anyway thanks for your comment.
Rgds WIMPY.

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iancrowson
iancrowson e2 Member 4204 forum postsiancrowson vcard United Kingdom128 Constructive Critique Points
15 Jan 2014 - 11:08 AM

Mostly a very good photo.
Nice skin tones and good detail on dress. Slightly uneven lighting across chest, lighter skin on her right hand side.
Points I notice are that the eyes need more light, they are just dark areas. Maybe a reflector low down in front might help. Also areas of the hair are blowing?over exposed and losing detail.
Light area on nose could be carefully cloned away slightly.?
Shooting RAW would give more chance of retrieving details in eyes and recovering hair detail. (wider dynamic range in RAW file)

regards
Ian

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mrswoolybill
mrswoolybill Critique Team 7328 forum postsmrswoolybill vcard United Kingdom884 Constructive Critique Points
15 Jan 2014 - 11:50 AM

The main issue that I see is the eyes, they look dead. A reflector carefully angled would have transformed this, I shall see what I can do to lighten the eyes but it may not work.

A few other points - the white gauze fabric bottom right is over-exposed and the large light area spoils the balance, I would crop off the bottom. Cropping a seated figure below the knees is not generally a good idea but it does work better when the knees are sideways on, and covered by skirt.

There's movement in her right hand, I suspect that that was not intentional.

And there are a lot of distracting light bits in the dark background.

I'll have a go at a Mod, I have some spare time at the moment - will upload if I can manage anything that I am satisfied with.
Moira

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banehawi
banehawi Critique Team 9708 forum postsbanehawi vcard Canada2670 Constructive Critique Points
15 Jan 2014 - 3:59 PM

The combination of the fact the model looks a lot more like a doll than a person, and the lack of illumination of the eyes work together to make this appear quite dead.

The model you cant control, but while concentrating on the gown, which youve got just right, you have forgotten the most important element of the shot, her face. So two thinks, - more light on her face, with with a fill flash, or a reflector, in addition to whatever you did. This might have been beyond your capabilities, and also, you didnt have a lot of control over the assistant either!

The focus on the gown has aldo redulted in her head being way too close to the top of the frame, so zooming out to 50mm would have helped with this, though Im sure it may have then included some spectators.


Mod uploaded, - even with detail recovered, the eyes look like they belong to a doll!


Regards


Willie

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pablophotographer

Wimpy, I am lost for words.
By all means, open that store with her modelling the clothes!
You'll become millionaire for sure Smile

I have no technical comments to make.
I suspect that she didn't pose for you.
She sits on a space outside, not a studio, so no lights/umbrellas/snoots/headlamps/softboxes/beautydishes available
I presume.
The white of her eyes is visible but only if you look straight ahead to her;
the mascara and her pupils hide it.
Could you have done any better?
Yes if you could make her turn her head and look at your lens.

kindly,
pablophotographer

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dudler
dudler Critique Team 1051 forum postsdudler vcard England185 Constructive Critique Points
15 Jan 2014 - 8:54 PM

A couple of things, for me.

The eyes are indeed dark - and they're heavily made up. However, I suspect a lot of processing here to suppress skin detail and enhance dress detail. Less is, for me, almost always more.

Her right hand is mysterious - out of focus, although her dress below it isn't: it looks like out-of-focus rather than movement blur, which (again) suggests you've done a lot of work on the shot.

The composition and pose are fine: not great, but certainly good. It's OK to have a model looking away, providing that's what you wanted to achieve, rather than a looking-at-the-camera picture. They're different, and both are valid. Except for glamour, where the model needs to moon or mug or pout at the camera...

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WimpyIskandar
WimpyIskandar e2 Member 3WimpyIskandar vcard Indonesia
16 Jan 2014 - 1:24 AM

dear IAN,frienkly i really enjoy to receive all comment from the critique team.........sometime make me smile and even laughing like a hell............and i always select photo which i will sent to the team and i presume that the crique come out will be similar into my opinion......and mostly it is like it is.
Noted yr dead eyes.........blowing hair........and over light nose........thks for the sharing.

dear MOIRA,you are the one that i always wanted to critique,it is sharp and deadly........thanks for dead eyes....no reflector effeck.....knee crop.....dark back ground,i presume that black background is affect of flash which isolate the model from her back ground,it is true ?? i like your modif upload.Anyway THKS.

dear Willie,the doll apprearance,yess it is correct............fill flash fail.......thanks for modif upload....best Rgds WIMPY.

dear Pablo,voila,open the stores with her,i think she will me sick and dead !!!!
u are correct,it is in an open large studio,i call as a natural studio.......eyes...head position....
fail flash.....Thanks

dear Dudler,almost all above said the same word........the eyes,hand fly mysteriously.....composititon noted ......and Thanks

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