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Brand:OLYMPUS IMAGING CORP.
Camera:Olympus E-520
Recording media:JPEG (digital)
Date Taken:25 Jun 2010 - 8:37 PM
Focal Length:38mm
Lens Max Aperture:f/3.5
Aperture:f/5.4
Shutter Speed:1/5sec
Exposure Comp:0.0
ISO:800
Exposure Mode:Aperture-priority AE
Metering Mode:ESP
Flash:Auto, Did not fire
Title:Model study
Username:MarvKoon MarvKoon
Uploaded:3 Aug 2011 - 10:44 PM
Tags:Portraits / people
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Tooth
Tooth  95772 forum posts Ireland227 Constructive Critique Points
4 Aug 2011 - 12:53 PMConstructive Critique!This comment was flagged as constructive critique! 

I'm really no expert in portrait shots, so I hope someone can come in soon and give you some tips re lighting - I'll just give some quick comments on the comp. as I see it.

A beautiful model and a lovely natural smile, but I think there's a few things going on in the background which distract and drag the eye away..

the shoe on the left (her right) I think might be a useful part of the comp but only if it's included whole and not cropped. The othert shoe growing out of her head is definittely a problem, as is also the other wires and stuff to the right of her head. Maybe a good bit of painstaking wotk with the clone tool could fix this, though obviously finding an uncluttered background at the start would be better.

As I've said, just my honest first impressions, hope someone with more relevant expertise can add to them


Stephen
Stephen

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DOGSBODY  51432 forum posts England30 Constructive Critique Points
4 Aug 2011 - 1:40 PM

This is a lovely shot of a beautiful young lady but, like Tooth, I do find the backgroundsomewhat confusing. I have done a very quick mod with a slight crop and the background cloned out. You may or may not like it. Andy

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banehawi
banehawi Critique Team 10865 forum postsbanehawi vcard Canada2860 Constructive Critique Points
4 Aug 2011 - 3:25 PMConstructive Critique!This comment was flagged as constructive critique! 

In addition to the above:

her face needs more light, - its in shade compared to the areas in the background. Either use s reflector, of better still fill flash, and you would also have obtained nice eye catch lights Using 1/5 second, - too slow, hopefully a solid support, - and even then, too slow for a portrait as the subject can move; loaded mods with the face brighter, and some noise removed. It also needs some sharpening.




Regards


Willie

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MarvKoon
MarvKoon  3 United Kingdom
5 Aug 2011 - 8:13 AM

Thanks all for your feedback. You're right. I should have paid more attention to the background!

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