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Taken at late afternoon with remote flash,at a parking yard where is the motor cycle dealer seliing their product.

dear TEAM Critique,
Pls critique the lighting effect dan compositition,
Thks n Rgds

Brand:Canon
Lens:24.0 - 70.0 mm (35 mm equivalent: 23.3 - 68.0 mm)
Recording media:JPEG (digital)
Date Taken:4 Apr 2013 - 4:16 AM
Focal Length:70mm
Aperture:f/3.5
Shutter Speed:1/80sec
Exposure Comp:0.0
ISO:400
Exposure Mode:Manual
Metering Mode:Spot
Flash:On, Fired
White Balance:Auto
Title:Motorcycle girl.
Username:WimpyIskandar WimpyIskandar
Uploaded:5 Apr 2013 - 2:55 AM
Tags:Portraits / people
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handlerstudio
handlerstudio e2 Member 2handlerstudio vcard United States5 Constructive Critique Points
5 Apr 2013 - 3:25 AM

Beautiful.....

Peter

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gallero
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5 Apr 2013 - 3:30 AM

Trabajo bien logrado.

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WimpyIskandar
WimpyIskandar e2 Member 4WimpyIskandar vcard Indonesia
5 Apr 2013 - 3:49 AM

dear Peter,Gallero,thkz for your respond and appreciation.rgds

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gwynn56
gwynn56  260 forum posts England
5 Apr 2013 - 5:09 AM

very nice Smile

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WimpyIskandar
WimpyIskandar e2 Member 4WimpyIskandar vcard Indonesia
5 Apr 2013 - 5:26 AM

dear Gwynn56,Thkz for your "very nice"

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arhab
arhab  243 forum posts Indonesia2 Constructive Critique Points
5 Apr 2013 - 7:12 AM

hi wimpy, i am afraid this doesn't work for me. your title said motorcycle woman, but i don't see the bike clearly. and the woman face not facing the camera and i think, the eyes should facing the camera to image can work. tetap jepret bro...

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paulbroad
paulbroad  681 forum posts United Kingdom842 Constructive Critique Points
5 Apr 2013 - 8:40 AM

She was obviously being photographed by someone else on the right and that is so very obvious. You must shout and attract the models attention in these circumstances, getting your shot as they look and pose. She is very close to the right, but if she had been looking at you, that would have been OK.

You are at least a stop under exposed, maybe more. Your flash has not been able to supply enough light and you are well under on ambient. You are using spot metering, so have metered from the wrong area. However, check your LCD after each shot, especially on manual, to b certain things are right.

Paul

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WimpyIskandar
WimpyIskandar e2 Member 4WimpyIskandar vcard Indonesia
5 Apr 2013 - 8:46 AM

dear Arhad,thank you,trima kasih.
dear Paulbroad,noted mssg and clearly understood,best regards

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arhab
arhab  243 forum posts Indonesia2 Constructive Critique Points
5 Apr 2013 - 12:46 PM

your other version work better. just follow paul suggestion about lighting and you are on the right track.

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paulbroad
paulbroad  681 forum posts United Kingdom842 Constructive Critique Points
5 Apr 2013 - 1:30 PM

Your own mod, second image is very much better. It is still just a tiny bit under exposed. To get good separation from the background I would dial in + 1 stop extra flash exposure.

Paul

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Nick_w
Nick_w e2 Member 73818 forum postsNick_w vcard England99 Constructive Critique Points
5 Apr 2013 - 2:28 PMConstructive Critique!This comment was flagged as constructive critique! 

I quite like the pose and expression. I like where theres no eye contact it gives a sense of mood.

It would work better cropping in from the LHS (as you did in the mod). Looking at the shadows, I would guess you are using bare flash. I'm not a great lover of bare flash, particularly on women it gives rather a harsh effect showing up every pore. And the shadows are so distinct and deep. If possible use an umbrella or softbox, alternatively a beauty dish (for this I think that would have worked very well).

Paul is right it is a bit underexposed, however that can be a matter of taste, do you want a good record shot, high key (which wouldn't suit this image) or low key.

Its a shame you recorded in JPEG, as a lot what I will cover below could easily be corrected using RAW - i.e. alter exposure, lift the shadows, and brighten the whites very very easily (and when your happy with one shot, you can copy the settings to all the other images in the series).

What I think it needs a couple of adjustment layers, a curves on for the black dress and , lift it in the centre. Mask out bits you dont want it to affect.

The second ajustment is for the skin, again a curves ajustment, but this time take highlights and lift slightly, and the shadows a very very slight lowering for a gentle s curve. Again mask to taste.

I would remove the red blob on the RHS in the background, and maybe desaturate the background by 5-10% just to make the main subject pop.

HTH

Nick

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banehawi
banehawi Critique Team 10781 forum postsbanehawi vcard Canada2795 Constructive Critique Points
5 Apr 2013 - 6:19 PM

Your mod is a much better shot. Its still underexposed, - looks like about a full stop, and Ive uploaded a mod with exposure increased, and colour de saturated a small amount. Ive cropped it to A4 also.

Ive lifted detail in the dress as suggested by Nick.

Spot metering in this case might not have been the best choice, as theres no real strong light differential between the subject and background, so a centre weighted average might have given you more exposure.



regards


Willie

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WimpyIskandar
WimpyIskandar e2 Member 4WimpyIskandar vcard Indonesia
5 Apr 2013 - 10:05 PM

dear Critique TEAM Willie,Nick,Paul,noted the mssg,Thkz

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WimpyIskandar
WimpyIskandar e2 Member 4WimpyIskandar vcard Indonesia
5 Apr 2013 - 10:09 PM

dear Arhad,Trima kasih,sdh menyemangati sya,Salam Jepret.
Thank You to keep me in high spirit,Rgds

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WimpyIskandar
WimpyIskandar e2 Member 4WimpyIskandar vcard Indonesia
7 Apr 2013 - 2:10 AM

dear Paintman and Banehawi Willie,Thkz for up load the modif photo,so i may learn something.
Rgds

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