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Hi just want u to look at this and any feed back neg or pos I will be greatfull, cheers guys, its an old army pal, don't like formal but did his wedding for a favor, con't say no thats my problem lol

Brand:Sony
Camera:Sony NEX-7
Lens:sel 18-55
Recording media:JPEG (digital)
Date Taken:30 Aug 2012 - 4:06 AM
Focal Length:18mm
Lens Max Aperture:f/3.5
Aperture:f/4.0
Shutter Speed:1/60sec
Exposure Comp:0.0
ISO:640
Exposure Mode:Program AE
Metering Mode:Multi-segment
Flash:Auto, Did not fire
White Balance:Auto
Title:My Pal
Username:Degs01 Degs01
Uploaded:23 Sep 2012 - 1:52 AM
Tags:Black & white, Portraits / people
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tonyguitar
23 Sep 2012 - 4:26 AM

Concept is carried out very well. A lifetime keepsake. TG

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Focus_Man
Focus_Man  4481 forum posts United Kingdom631 Constructive Critique Points
23 Sep 2012 - 9:30 AM

Well I think this is agreat idea and I like it. However, one little thing which tends to put me off is the tiara on the bride's head in the faint portrait, sort of splits the image of teh B&G walking down the stairs. Could the picture be arranged so that it crosses either above or below them?

Whatever my comments, they will love this.

Frank

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Sooty_1 Critique Team 41207 forum posts United Kingdom198 Constructive Critique Points
23 Sep 2012 - 4:01 PM

Personally, I don't like it much...it reminds me of the kitsch 80's double exposures, but if the couple like it, that's what matters.

I think the edges could be blended better on the transparent image as you can see the square where you've imported the image, and maybe it would be better if she was looking down on the couple. Otherwise, I can't think of any way to improve it really.

Nick

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Jestertheclown
23 Sep 2012 - 4:06 PM

I like the idea Degs.
The background image seems to be very definitely black and white with lots of contrast, a bit more that I think that I'd have applied.
The overlay works pretty well and the shot you've chosen to use is an excellent choice.
Personally though, I'd work on it (the overlaying shot) to select just her head and shoulders, losing the whole of its background (to transparency) and use just the head and shoulders with soft edges and a slightly lower opacity. You'd need to experiment to get it looking as you want it.
I've added a mod. in which I've cropped the uploaded image to remove the sides and sized it to a ratio of 8x10 at which it could be printed. That's also had the benefit of (just about!) bringing all the diagonal lead lines produced naturally by the staircase in from the corners.
I don't know what software you use; anything will take care of the crop and the rest is pretty straightforward in CS and I'd guess that whatever you've used here would do that too.
Give me a shout if I can help.
Hope this helps.
No BS!
Cheers.
Bren.

Edit; I'd lose, or at least modify that heavy black border. It looks too reminiscent of a funeral shot to me.
In fact, looking at my mod., without it, the contrast seems to be less of an issue. Could be the border and the dark edges of the shot which I removed were causing an illusion.

Last Modified By Jestertheclown at 23 Sep 2012 - 4:11 PM

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paulbroad
paulbroad  781 forum posts United Kingdom851 Constructive Critique Points
23 Sep 2012 - 5:25 PM

This is going to be a subjective image. Not for me at all I fear. Appears as a confused image where the overall effect is very dark and heavy. Just me, but on the odd occasion I get conned into weddings I refuse to do any of the weird stuff.

Paul

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pamelajean Critique Team 8768 forum postspamelajean vcard United Kingdom1596 Constructive Critique Points
23 Sep 2012 - 8:44 PM

I think the background image is very nice, lovely symmetry and composition, but I am not keen on the superimposed head of the bride in front of it and directly on top of the people on the stairs. Just my view.
Pamela.

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Degs01
Degs01  4 United Kingdom
23 Sep 2012 - 9:20 PM

Thanks Bren u give good advise and took it on bored, I know what u r saying about aspec however never printed any photo so still lots to be leaned again thanks Bren

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banehawi
banehawi Critique Team 10865 forum postsbanehawi vcard Canada2860 Constructive Critique Points
24 Sep 2012 - 3:21 PM

Lots of good advice already.

The image itself, without the overlay is way too dark, and the contrast is too high. Do you have the colour original you could upload? Maybe we can help with the conversion to mono?

If this is sorted out, then we have the overlay which needs to be more subtle as Bren has shown.

Finally, the aspect ratio is one that you wont print on standard paper, - its needs to be cropped quite a bit.

I have uploaded a mod to show what I mean.


regards



Willie

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Degs01
Degs01  4 United Kingdom
24 Sep 2012 - 3:38 PM

Hi Willie your mod brings the image to life and very nice it is thank you, I will upload the orig and see what you can do, I can only lad one photo a day and I want to upload a new one, I am a Hitchccck and Bresson fan and I try to get my insperation from the both, moments and Hitchcocks style of film work, alway trying to capture a still that you could print off a film reel ie hitchcock and its avoiding me, my never happen but i live in hope LOL

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