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Hi
These old things are great to work with-in contrast to all modern
designs.
Try to work with dark contrasts and structure.

Brand:NIKON CORPORATION
Camera:Nikon D600 Check out Nikon Nation!
Lens:Nikon 14-24mm f2.8 G AF-S ED
Recording media:JPEG (digital)
Date Taken:19 Jan 2014 - 9:12 AM
Focal Length:19mm
Lens Max Aperture:f/2.8
Aperture:f/5.6
Shutter Speed:1/60sec
Exposure Comp:0.0
ISO:500
Exposure Mode:Aperture-priority AE
Metering Mode:Multi-segment
Flash:No Flash
White Balance:Auto
Title:Old and closed
Username:totti totti
Uploaded:19 Jan 2014 - 12:55 PM
Tags:Architecture, Digital art, Entrance, Old
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Dowie
Dowie  1 United Kingdom4 Constructive Critique Points
19 Jan 2014 - 1:05 PMConstructive Critique!This comment was flagged as constructive critique! 

Totti, what a great location! the door and colour tones around the door work really well, the less saturated colours around the outside take the eye in but I'd try a vignette instead , so you keep the colours of the stone through out. It's crying out for a figure but Like it just the way it is too.

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mrswoolybill
mrswoolybill Critique Team 7435 forum postsmrswoolybill vcard United Kingdom1024 Constructive Critique Points
19 Jan 2014 - 1:36 PMConstructive Critique!This comment was flagged as constructive critique! 

It's a wonderful subject. Layers of peeling paint telling different stories about occupants and use; botched DIY repairs, vandalism, so much past is there.

I want to move a step to the right here, because decay and grot always look so wonderfully incongruous when presented in a deadpan, formal, symmetrical style. Maybe that's too conventional though? The alternative would be to move well to the left, for a more oblique, less statement-like composition. This is neither one nor the other, which slightly annoys me.

I also want a few more pixels at the top, it looks cramped there.

The burnt edges are very much your trademark and it suits masonry particularly well.
Moira

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dudler
dudler Critique Team 11103 forum postsdudler vcard England313 Constructive Critique Points
19 Jan 2014 - 3:43 PM

I agree with Moira: vertically, you need to have included the tops of the stones forming the arch. Compositionally, I'd have gone for the utterly formal, striaght-on shot - but either variation would do.

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paulbroad
paulbroad  781 forum posts United Kingdom853 Constructive Critique Points
19 Jan 2014 - 4:51 PM

It is technically well done, but very general. What , exactly, is the subject? It needs something, possibly quite small, but bright and eye catching to act as a foil to set the rest of the image off. Everything is a similar dark tone and it needs something to lift it xompositionally.

Paul

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O.K. totti, I see your subject is the entrance.

I can't tell of what entrance it used to be and I won't investigate it by blowing up the image to see what is written on each side of the number 59.

What makes you to raise your camera and shoot something and teh choice of the theme is a personal matter. I was told sometime ago and I have seen it being applied in marketing campaigns people prefer to see nice things. I have seen campaigns with strong meanings like the black armed man holding a human bone as a baton. But that was one picture amongst thousands. If you want to attract attention go for beauty rather then desolation.

It could be that your subject is desolation itself or textures or even the blending of these muted colours, grey, black, beige, brown.
I think you ought to give more space on teh top and the bottom of your frame, go wider possibly.

What no-one else seems to be wondering about is the actual height of the door, it doesn't look a tall door to me.
I can somehow understand why you have chosen this composition and you have done well to shoot from a height above 1,60m so as to show us the step that someone would have to go down and enter that space to open the door, but on the other hand exactly becase of the curve shape of the lens a perception of along bottom compared to a short top has been created.

People forget that until roughly the last ten years advertorial pictures of models were taken with medium format cameras, held at a hip height. That makes the models not to look distorted. Where does this imply to your picture? I suspect that the door might look more even if you had kneeled and shooting it from the height of the door handle - but then of course we could possibly not see the step.

Summing up: Desolation can also be showed by focusing in the details, beautiful subjects tend to attract attention, that's why the majority of models are good looking, when you shoot full figures of people standing, aim for the bellybutton.

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Jestertheclown
19 Jan 2014 - 8:07 PM

I can see why you were attracted to this but it needed to be shot from slightly farther back ro allow more room around it.
I can envisage this (as I've suggested) with a cat lying on the edge of the step.

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dark_lord
dark_lord Critique Team 101475 forum postsdark_lord vcard England130 Constructive Critique Points
19 Jan 2014 - 8:40 PM

Don't know where the 'nice things' has come from, can't see why it would apply here??? Desolation and decay make for strong interesting images, they have a point to make and you've done it well here.
Moira's suggestions are good. What it means is we all see this subject slightly differently and that there are several variations that you can shoot here and I hope you did, or at least will go back and do.
Keith

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