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SONY DSC Shot taken against the light filtering through the slatted blind. An exercise in composition.

Brand:Sony
Camera:Sony NEX-5
Lens:E 30mm F3.5 Macro
Recording media:JPEG (digital)
Date Taken:24 Jun 2013 - 6:27 PM
Focal Length:30mm
Lens Max Aperture:f/3.5
Aperture:f/4.5
Shutter Speed:1/80sec
Exposure Comp:0.0
ISO:200
Exposure Mode:Program AE
Metering Mode:Multi-segment
Flash:On, Fired
White Balance:Auto
Title:On Our Kitchen /Window Sill
Username:charisma515 charisma515
Uploaded:8 Jul 2013 - 8:36 AM
Tags:Composition, Indoors, Natural light, Specialist / abstract
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chase
chase Critique Team 91118 forum postschase vcard England240 Constructive Critique Points
8 Jul 2013 - 6:00 PM

Using flash in a situation like this is always going to give you outline shadows on the bg,a sure tell-tale sign.
The composition works ok on the diagonal side of things but for me the image looks a little complicated & rushed.The different pots are each competing against each other as are the flowers.
Maybe you could have gone much more simplistic & photographed the plants/flowers as individuals & used their natural shape/form to create your composition...particularly the Orchid with it's nice flowing,natural curve.
If you wish to use the blinds as a bg then try lighting with a couple of torches in order to eliminate the hard shadows behind...or,just increase your exposure time,your subjects are static so you can take as much time as you need.
If this were mine I would have used the light coming in from the blinds as shadows,placing the subjects away from them ( you would then have your back to the blinds) & used a plain piece of light card as a bg.I have seen this done many times on a portrait,no reason not to do it using flowers as your subject.
The colours are good & you have enough detail in each of the three.

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mrswoolybill Critique Team 7433 forum postsmrswoolybill vcard United Kingdom1019 Constructive Critique Points
8 Jul 2013 - 7:01 PMConstructive Critique!This comment was flagged as constructive critique! 

Welcome to the Critique Gallery, I think this is your first upload here!
Chase has covered the technical issues, can I add a few compositional notes?
I really like the way you have seen this. It has a clean, simple formality - three different items, small and medium looking up to a taller item which is bending down to converse. It reminds me of the Ronnie Corbett, Ronnie Barker, John Cleese sketch of many years ago - 'I look up to him because he is upper class... I look down on him because he is lower class...
I know my place...'

More seriously, some minor changes could improve this greatly but they depend on the software that you have available. If you have the Clone tool, get rid of that bit of pull-cord hanging on the right. If you don't have clone, a slight crop will get rid of it, but would make the right side rather cramped looking.
If you have Skew (in Adobe software it is under Image>Transform ), skew the top left up a degree, bottom left down a couple of degrees. When you have a formal, linear background like this the horizontals need to be true.
Look out for minor niggles like the above when composing, it's worth taking time.
I'd also like to see a bit more depth at the bottom of the frame, the pots sit right on the edge and that doesn't balance the height that you have allowed above the orchid.
It might be possible to add a bit more presence to the flowers using the Burn tool - flash has rather washed out the colour.
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Moira

Last Modified By mrswoolybill at 8 Jul 2013 - 7:05 PM

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charisma515
9 Jul 2013 - 10:58 AM

Chase thanks for the comments particularly about the lighting, which is very helpful
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charisma515
9 Jul 2013 - 11:02 AM

Moira, thanks for all the Trouble you have taken in your welcome comments. It was careless of me to leave the end of the pull cord in there. I have Photoshop CS6 so there is really no excuse!

I have only submitted three earlier photos for comments and mods before so I am fairly new to this and therefore your comments have been very helpful.
Fred

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