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iso : 100
lens kit 18-70mm
speed : 1/125
f: f/56

Camera:Sony Alpha 200
Lens:Sony kit DT 18-70mm
Recording media:JPEG (digital)
Title:Perspektif
Username:Bungabelandajr Bungabelandajr
Uploaded:14 Oct 2010 - 10:47 PM
Tags:Black & white, Close-up / macro, Still life
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DavidBathurst
15 Oct 2010 - 6:50 AM

Good shot, works well in B & W. I keep wanting to move the camera dead center though. Well done, David

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DRicherby
DRicherby  6269 forum posts United Kingdom725 Constructive Critique Points
15 Oct 2010 - 5:32 PM

Excellent shot and a good black and white conversion. I think I'd prefer the camera dead-centre to really exploit the symmetry of the hoops (maybe it's something about being called David Smile ) — you can count the bricks to work out where the exact centre is, if you want to go that way. I'd also prefer to see the front hoop and the bricks on the ground in sharp focus. Using a narrower aperture (higher f-number) and focusing a little closer should get that quite easily. You'll certainly have enough depth of field at f/11 and probably at f/8, too. You can always go to ISO-200 to keep the shutter speed down; you probably won't notice any change in image quality from the slightly higher ISO.

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NEWMANP
NEWMANP e2 Member 61587 forum postsNEWMANP vcard United Kingdom574 Constructive Critique Points
17 Oct 2010 - 6:37 PM

i like the use of the rolled tubes as a pattern to show the recessesion down the centre but i find the mix of pattern and natural elements is in conflict. im unsure if its enough to simply take the eye down the centre without a stopper or focal point at the end.

if you take the top left side, you have the light coming thro the trees and this is rather distracting, id suggest making the image more arty by selecting and turning this dappled areas in plain solid black blocks to act as a foil to the polish on the bent tubes.

the area of bricks at the front base is well out of focus and this should have been rendered sharp by increasing the depth of field and choosing the area on which to focus with more deliberation. other wise you need to be enphasising shallow depth of field and making the area of sharpness very shallow and in a specificaly chosen zone. as stated above, get down to f11 to f16, up the iso or use a tripod and choose where you want to focus instead of allowing the auto focus to choose.

Phil

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NEWMANP
NEWMANP e2 Member 61587 forum postsNEWMANP vcard United Kingdom574 Constructive Critique Points
17 Oct 2010 - 6:53 PM

i meant to mention by the way, that the choice to go mono was a good one and the conversion was handled well
Phil

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monstersnowman
20 Oct 2010 - 5:49 PM

Having not read the other comments my critique would be .. the converging lines of the centre of the curved bars would look great in the centre in my opinion ... so to achieve this a lower perspective and a slight move to the right. Then making sure the distance from the top and the sides of the bars to the image edge is exactly the same all round to reinforce the uniformity .. I think this slight adjustment in viewpoint would tie in all the lines that would lead you to the image centre and strengthen the image slightly. Hope this is helpful critique. P.S. the mono is good .. is focuses your view on the pattern rather having an added distraction of colour.

Last Modified By monstersnowman at 20 Oct 2010 - 5:51 PM

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Bungabelandajr
25 Oct 2010 - 2:56 PM

@Monstersnowman : thanks you for you comment and advice...

greetings...
Budi

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