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comments and thought would be greatly appreciated

Camera:EOS 20 D
Lens:17-40
Recording media:JPEG (digital)
Title:Portrait 1
Username:jamiemilliken jamiemilliken
Uploaded:15 Jan 2009 - 1:35 PM
Tags:Portrait photography, Portraits / people
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grahamf
grahamf  6 South Africa
15 Jan 2009 - 1:58 PM

Wonderful portrait of father and son. Well done.

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roverrat
roverrat e2 Member 6roverrat vcard Germany5 Constructive Critique Points
15 Jan 2009 - 2:03 PM

Terrific lighting and a super pose, welcome to EPZ Smile
Alex

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DannyLenihan
15 Jan 2009 - 4:44 PMConstructive Critique!This comment was flagged as constructive critique! 

It's a wonderful concept, even if the execution needs a little seeing to.

The good bits: I love the composition and the skin tones. The image speaks of protection, raw grittiness, tenderness and love.

The bits I think need work:

1: The crop is a little too tight. You clipped the elbow which I find quite distracting, and the top of the frame encroaches on the guy's head. I also think you've lost a lot by cropping out the baby's bum, and the guys arm cradling it.
2: The nappy and part of the baby's forearm are precariously close to being hotspots. The nappy is already blown out because of it's colour, and really needs some texture in it. I find my eyes drawn to the bright white, instead of to the man's eyes, which are, in my humble opinion, the focal point of this shot.
3: If the guy had just lowered the baby a touch, or if you'd got higher above them, you wouldn't have that left ear encroaching on the guy's face - almost into his right eye.

These are all very very minor details, but they make the difference between a good shot, and a great one.

Welcome to EPZ. A great start to your PF.

Danny

Last Modified By DannyLenihan at 15 Jan 2009 - 4:45 PM

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jamiemilliken
15 Jan 2009 - 6:34 PM

Thank you all so much for your feedback, really enjoying being part of EZ and already reaping the benefits. Thank you for your thoroughness Dannyjames you have some excellent points there. more pics to come soon!

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SPOTON
SPOTON  6 South Africa
15 Jan 2009 - 7:35 PM

This is a beautiful portrait - has a wonderful feel to it, well done! Love, Mandi

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Anjantoo
Anjantoo  6 England1 Constructive Critique Points
15 Jan 2009 - 9:40 PM

I must admit I never seem to really notice problems until someone else points them out (usually on my work!).
This is a beautiful portrait, and a lovely tattoo too!
Jann
xxx

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banehawi
banehawi Critique Team 10868 forum postsbanehawi vcard Canada2867 Constructive Critique Points
16 Jan 2009 - 12:25 AMConstructive Critique!This comment was flagged as constructive critique! 

It is a nice concept, - I think it would be a lot stronger if the adult had been looking into the camera. Im drawn to his eyes, and find Im wondering what hes looking at.

I agree with the bulk of whats been stated above, - and I have loaded a severely cropped mod that might be an idea worth pursuing.



Regards


Willie

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jamiemilliken
16 Jan 2009 - 9:35 AM

Hey Banehawi

Thank you very much for the mod and the advice very much appreciated indeed

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