ship yard

banehawi (Critique Team)

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28 Jun 2012 - 5:49 PM

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Hi Russ, a few suggestions and comments on this one. The choice of mono is good for this. The composition has the "horizon" right in the middle, which is less than ideal, - best if its on a third. Ive tried this in the mod, - I would have preferred to have more of the lower part, but if I cropped it that way I would have lost part of a chimney, so I had to crop to favour the top. The use of a +1 has given you blown sky, but decent lower area, but if you hadnt used +1, you may have had a better sky, and psot processing is able to recover underexposed detail (not blown highlights) so it may have been better to go for no compensation. Its understandable that you did, anticipating an underexposed shot, however, its only when the main subject has the sky behond it for example that you would +1 to make sure the subject was ok, - in this case, the sky is actually part of the subject.

Anyway, - I like the lower area, so you may want to leave it as is, but I would tone down the upper highlights as much as possible. I used the highlight tool in Photoshop CS.

two mods added with the crop, both have highlights toned down, and verticals straighter (might be caused by lens distortion), with mod2 a toned version.



regards



Willie

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30 Jun 2012 - 9:39 AM

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Well Russ as you may well know, central horizons seldom succeed because they tend to split the picture into two halves. (I say seldom because there are occasions, which have to be judged upon viewing, where it does) This is why the rule of thirds helps, it allows the viewer to major on one section of the picture with the smaller section adding supplememtary interest. You as the uploader have to make the decicion as to where your line of thirds will be, top or botton section by assessing which part hold the major section of viewability and which is the supplementary.

In your case here I would also straighten the stacks to make them vertical and maybe do something about the straight line emanating from the mid of the sheds - I don't know what it is so I don'y know what to do about it - which also shows in the reflection, to me it seems to be a little eye-catching.

You have a photogenic scene here and plenty more opportunities to play around with it. Nice work.

Frank