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Frankly, i love taking snaps of clouds. Various cloud formations, with increased aperture, i really love it.

This one is also taken in the same location where many of my cloud shots have taken place.
I really like those rays which seems to radiate over the tower. In my camera it wass very prominent and real, bt here its a bit flat.
Any C&C will be appreciated.

Will it look good in Mono or Sepia?

Brand:Sony
Camera:Sony Cyber-shot HX9V
Lens:sony lens g
Recording media:JPEG (digital)
Date Taken:28 Jul 2014 - 4:06 PM
Focal Length:4.3mm
Lens Max Aperture:f/3.3
Aperture:f/8.0
Shutter Speed:1/640sec
Exposure Comp:0.0
ISO:100
Exposure Mode:Manual
Metering Mode:Center-weighted average
Flash:Off, Did not fire
White Balance:Daylight Fluorescent
Title:Sky Shot: 1
Username:IshanPathak IshanPathak
Uploaded:28 Jul 2014 - 11:27 AM
Votes:Voting Disabled

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dudler
dudler Critique Team 11108 forum postsdudler vcard England319 Constructive Critique Points
28 Jul 2014 - 1:53 PMConstructive Critique!This comment was flagged as constructive critique! 

Clouds are always a lovely sight, and the issue is catching that on film or sensor.

As I'm sure you realise by now, this is pushing the tonal range you camera can cope with, and you've got some blown highlights, which is a bit of an issue.

It looks fine in mono (see mod), though I feel there's soemthing missing in terms of composition. The tower looks like an intrusion you couldn't get rid of: it needs to be bigger and bolder, I reckon, and occupy most of the right-hand side of the frame.

Moving closer, and really placing it in relation to the clouds would be good. Dodging and burning will allow you to emphasise the beams of light, if you want to.

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paulbroad
paulbroad  781 forum posts United Kingdom855 Constructive Critique Points
28 Jul 2014 - 2:24 PM

Very difficult to get within the sebsor tonal range, and you are a bit off. The highlights are blown, but to get the exposure right for highlights, then the dark areas would be very dark. Not really sure about your content here. Is it the clouds, the sun beams or the tower that is the subject?

PAUL

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IshanPathak
IshanPathak e2 Member 86 forum postsIshanPathak vcard India12 Constructive Critique Points
28 Jul 2014 - 3:13 PM

Hello John and Paul. Thank you for your critiques Smile


Quote: his is pushing the tonal range you camera can cope with

Paul also said similar thing. I couldnt grasp it. Pardon hereBlushBlush

Indeed John it was something couldn't get rid of. I was on my terrace and hence very limited, as the trees/towers were there and i hardly could move acc to my need.

I have got another Version of the image, in which tower is slightly bigger though it does no provide a major change for me.

Your both mod looks great.

Paul:

Quote:
ot really sure about your content here. Is it the clouds, the sun beams or the tower that is the subject?


I wanted all 3 to be in the frame. With main subject being the Clouds. Those rays above the tower gave a nice touch to the image.

Ishan

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mrswoolybill
mrswoolybill Critique Team 7440 forum postsmrswoolybill vcard United Kingdom1028 Constructive Critique Points
28 Jul 2014 - 4:45 PMConstructive Critique!This comment was flagged as constructive critique! 

I like the way this relates the heavens to the earth. The tower rises up, the trees provide framing on three sides, the sky fits in between them rather than hanging over them.

The tower is neither vertical nor at a dynamic angle, it's sort of between the two - that's the main weakness for me. I want to rotate a bit, but still keep the foliage top and bottom right as a significant element in the composition - that will need a bit of cheating.

The darker left side of the frame adds nothing, the story is in the burst of light rays framed by cloud and foliage. So I would crop. Whatever else is done, that stray bit of leaf poking in on the right needs to go.

I shall see what I can do.
Moira

Last Modified By mrswoolybill at 28 Jul 2014 - 4:45 PM

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IshanPathak
IshanPathak e2 Member 86 forum postsIshanPathak vcard India12 Constructive Critique Points
28 Jul 2014 - 4:58 PM

Thank you Moira for your critique. Your mod i sgreat Smile

Ishan

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banehawi
banehawi Critique Team 10876 forum postsbanehawi vcard Canada2876 Constructive Critique Points
28 Jul 2014 - 6:21 PM

Are you practicing with different colours?


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IshanPathak
IshanPathak e2 Member 86 forum postsIshanPathak vcard India12 Constructive Critique Points
28 Jul 2014 - 6:47 PM

Willie: Er yup. You can say it. I love capturing different clouds, and try to get as much different colors in the shots as possible.

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IshanPathak
IshanPathak e2 Member 86 forum postsIshanPathak vcard India12 Constructive Critique Points
13 Aug 2014 - 8:28 AM

Nice mod kuipje. Though why those yellow spots?

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kuipje
kuipje Junior e2 Member kuipje vcard Netherlands
13 Aug 2014 - 4:40 PM

Sorry about those yellow spots. I was eaten some Gouda Cheese and forgot to clean the screen. Hope some day you can forgive me.
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Bianca & Jos

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