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Black and white is not something I dabble in very often, so I thought I'd try and stretch myself with a busking series in mono.

Any advice, constructive crit, or comments greatly appreciated. Always looking to improve.
Hope you're having a great hol. Thanks for looking, P, X

Camera:eos 1D MK11
Lens:Tamron 28-300 Check out Totally Tamron!
Recording media:RAW (digital)
Title:Street art. 1
Username:Patricia Fenn Patricia Fenn
Uploaded:26 Dec 2008 - 8:33 AM
Tags:Black & white, Classical, Guitar, Photo journalism, Portraits / people, Portugal
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Buffalo_Tom
Buffalo_Tom e2 Member 72322 forum postsBuffalo_Tom vcard Wales9 Constructive Critique Points
26 Dec 2008 - 8:59 AM

Love the concentration on the ladies face,excellent mono and dof Patricia.
Tom.

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CarolG
CarolG e2 Member 7125 forum postsCarolG vcard Greece16 Constructive Critique Points
26 Dec 2008 - 9:10 AM

Beautifully captured, Patricia. Hope you had a good day yesterday. Carol

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26 Dec 2008 - 9:12 AM

I like the diagonal crop on this it gives n extra dimension to the portrait.

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AlanBW
AlanBW  8 England
26 Dec 2008 - 9:31 AM

Excellent angle and superb concentration

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rontear
rontear e2 Member 11rontear vcard England4 Constructive Critique Points
26 Dec 2008 - 9:46 AM

Intense concentration, soft lighting works with mono Patricia. Ron.

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IanA
IanA  103048 forum posts England12 Constructive Critique Points
26 Dec 2008 - 9:46 AMConstructive Critique!This comment was flagged as constructive critique! 

I like the subject and angle/composition very much. The DOF is spot on, but I feel the background distracts a little, reducing the impact of the image.
It's the OOF black blotches of the windows that are doing it!

I don't know if the shot was set up or candid (the lighting is spot on, so tempted to think it was set up) but with the B/W treatment the background could be less contrasty bringing out the subject a little more.
Cracking effort though.

Ian

Last Modified By IanA at 26 Dec 2008 - 9:47 AM

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Patricia Fenn
26 Dec 2008 - 10:20 AM

Thanks Ian, Actually it was a candid in a town square in Portugal. Very strong sunlight reflecting off everything.
I did reduce the background contrasts, but perhaps you're right, a little more might have worked better.
I would have preferred to move a little to the right, but there was a great black lamppost that I couldn't avoid.
I'll put the original in the variations.

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IanA
IanA  103048 forum posts England12 Constructive Critique Points
26 Dec 2008 - 10:47 AM

That just shows how wrong I can be!! Wink

Ian

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shaks
shaks  11561 forum posts Tokelau1 Constructive Critique Points
26 Dec 2008 - 10:51 AM

I really like what you have done with V1. Shows so much concentration.

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Adobecs
Adobecs  8113 forum posts England
26 Dec 2008 - 11:15 AM

Great photo, version 1 for me.
Pat.

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banehawi
banehawi Critique Team 9707 forum postsbanehawi vcard Canada2668 Constructive Critique Points
26 Dec 2008 - 4:19 PM

This is an excellent conversion Patricia, and the crop is also well done, removing much of the background.

I dont see any issues at all with the blurred background, - perhaps it an issue of monitor calibration. I also wish that lamp post wasnt there!


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Diana
Diana  72011 forum posts Netherlands19 Constructive Critique Points
26 Dec 2008 - 9:59 PM

V1 is so much more personal

Diana

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NEWMANP e2 Member 61581 forum postsNEWMANP vcard United Kingdom572 Constructive Critique Points
27 Dec 2008 - 8:44 PMConstructive Critique!This comment was flagged as constructive critique! 

well i have read the above and looked at both versions, in my opinion, the colour version fades into insignificance beside the excellent mono version. in V2 the colour, the background distract from the strength of the portrait and remove significance from the main focal area including the powerfully placed neck of the guitar,
in colour, the guitar case, details in the paving, row of people all attract too much attention as they are sharper and in contrasting colour.
In V1, the mono conversion, excellent in its own right had been supplemented by the softening of the background and a tighter, more effective crop which concentrates attention on the beautifully arranged triangular composition of the eye to frets , down the neck of the guitar and back to the face,
This is a classic case of taking something ordinary in the camera and turning it into something special, i hope it scores high.
Phil

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whiteswan01
27 Dec 2008 - 9:44 PM

i like th e dof field youve done like the corner shot
Well done
Dawn

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maratsuikka
28 Dec 2008 - 7:47 AM

EXCELLENT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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fatherpie
fatherpie  5 England12 Constructive Critique Points
28 Dec 2008 - 8:32 AM


Quote: in my opinion, the colour version fades into insignificance beside the excellent mono version.

I'm with Phil on this. I loved the image from the thumb nail but seeing the original makes the conversion all the more impressive. A well observed moment complemented by excellent processing has made this a stunning candid in my mind.
Regards
Dave

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andy210966
28 Dec 2008 - 4:36 PM

This is a lovely shot and I am glad to be number 30! Congrats on the RC.

Andy

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thorn
thorn  9124 forum posts Scotland2 Constructive Critique Points
28 Dec 2008 - 5:00 PM

Hi Pat,
I like both shots,but i prefer the b/w as this one makes the girls hair and face stand out as it does the fingering,concentration,expresssion,candidness and the b/g does not detract from the musician.Great angle,dof and presentation.take care,AnnSmile

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looboss
looboss  73124 forum posts United Kingdom7 Constructive Critique Points
31 Dec 2008 - 4:30 PM

Oh Yes! the B&W for def!! works very well.

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ketch e2 Member 6770 forum postsketch vcard Turks and Caicos Islands50 Constructive Critique Points
1 Jan 2009 - 5:42 PM

The colour original works well enough - but I think how clever to spot the potential for a tighter mono crop. So many of us would be happy with the original and not continue looking for perfection, which I think the B&W is.

It has superbly strong diagonals (I would have been tempted to get these working left to right by flipping the image - how sneaky is that?) - the mono treatment makes the eye linger on just the three key components: guitar head, hand and head and of course all three are completely interconnected. This make the image hugely powerful.

Great piece of work IMO

Robert

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2 Jan 2009 - 6:14 PM

The mono version is by far the better interpretation Patricia. Well done.

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porty2003
porty2003  1097 forum posts Scotland
2 Jan 2009 - 8:06 PM

Great 'study'.No1 for me.
John.

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4 Jan 2009 - 4:05 AM

V1 for me, superb mono - Jonathan

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stuart davies
22 Jan 2009 - 1:16 PM

Brilliant!

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