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This is one of my favourite image from both recent shoots. You have to get close to see all the detail. Its probably the image that disturbs me the most. The more I look at them the more I prefer the colour version, the B&W version I like but it depends on the angle you are looking at, so perhaps it needs darking up more.

Ive done a fairly tight crop as has been suggested in other posts, I'll post the un-cropped, unedited version on my blog www.lightprojectionart.co.uk


I wanted to create a disturbing abstract image and hopefully this has been achieved.

as always thoughts and comments are welcome. Thank you.

Recording media:JPEG (digital)
Title:The tension draws us in
Username:nineteen68 nineteen68
Uploaded:27 Mar 2013 - 6:27 AM
Tags:Black & white, Digital art, Digitally manipulated, Portraits / people, Specialist / abstract
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paulbroad
paulbroad  681 forum posts United Kingdom843 Constructive Critique Points
27 Mar 2013 - 8:23 AMConstructive Critique!This comment was flagged as constructive critique! 

This is much stronger and more effective. I would prefer the images separate though. Not easy to look at together and then would also be bigger. Get in close and fill the frame is a good rule, and it works here.

Best yet.

Paul

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mrswoolybill Critique Team 7394 forum postsmrswoolybill vcard United Kingdom970 Constructive Critique Points
27 Mar 2013 - 9:30 AMConstructive Critique!This comment was flagged as constructive critique! 

Dark! Like this a lot, the face projected onto the knee is amazing. I think I would prefer to see one or the other in isolation, and maybe crop off the armpit on the right.
I was intending to go back to your previous upload and add that if you can apply this technique to nude (and you need to feel comfortable with that, as well as your model), then b&w could become really interesting.
Moira

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pamelajean Critique Team 8752 forum postspamelajean vcard United Kingdom1578 Constructive Critique Points
27 Mar 2013 - 5:39 PMConstructive Critique!This comment was flagged as constructive critique! 

I'm beginning to think you're onto a winner with this technique, Lee, and it's really growing on meWink.
As others have said, seeing the two versions separately would be better.
This one has intrigue, it has to be viewed for quite a while in order to understand it. Then I find myself wanting to forget about the technique altogether, and it becomes an abstract work of art.
I'm leaning towards the mono for preference.
Personally, Lee, I don't find it disturbing (that may be because I thoroughly enjoy horror filmsTongue), but rather fascinating.
One of your best.
Pamela.

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nineteen68
27 Mar 2013 - 10:23 PM

Wow, thanks Moira, Paul & Pamela. These are really positive and constructive. thank you so much. Some times I think I am just producing nonsense and no-one will like it or appreciate what I'm doing. But then again you give me hope. I need to concentrate on getting the composition right then tweaking and really thinking about the end result. Than k you again. I'm still going through the last 2 shoots and I have another book for next week so i will post more . Than k you again

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Paree  9594 forum posts3 Constructive Critique Points
27 Mar 2013 - 10:35 PMConstructive Critique!This comment was flagged as constructive critique! 

hello Lee,
i also think you are on to a winner,
as i said before this is original, fresh and interesting,
outside the box.

i like the colour side,
the shaft of light on the t shirt is a stoke of genius,

personally i think the left eye is unnecessary and detracts from the rest which looks good on its own,
the left eye makes it to busy and cluttered,
but hey who am i to tell you what to do, Blush
its brilliant


paree GrinGrin

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nineteen68
27 Mar 2013 - 10:46 PM

Thank you Paree. There are so many ways of editing these shots, its really hard at times to know to start and stop. Smile

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