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I took this at a practise night at our new local club,I would value all your c&c and any advice you could give

many thanks
billy

Brand:NIKON CORPORATION
Camera:Nikon D90 Check out Nikon Nation!
Recording media:JPEG (digital)
Date Taken:25 Sep 2012 - 8:14 PM
Focal Length:70mm
Lens Max Aperture:f/2.8
Aperture:f/8.0
Shutter Speed:1/60sec
Exposure Comp:-0.270250
ISO:400
Exposure Mode:Aperture-priority AE
Metering Mode:Multi-segment
Flash:On, Return detected
White Balance:Auto
Title:tom
Username:williamsloan williamsloan
Uploaded:27 Sep 2012 - 11:11 AM
Tags:Portraits / people
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Fefe
Fefe e2 Member 2Fefe vcard United Kingdom28 Constructive Critique Points
27 Sep 2012 - 1:30 PMConstructive Critique!This comment was flagged as constructive critique! 

Hello Billy, Portrait images are not something I feel really up to speed on to critic but I can say that in V1the image is spoilt by cropping off the beard as this is a major part of the subjects character, the detail and light are good but the bg is a bit like a photo booth curtainTongue The subject also has a very uninterested look on his face.........................
All that said I love what you have done to V3............. Excellent work BillyGrinGrin
Diane

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27 Sep 2012 - 4:14 PMConstructive Critique!This comment was flagged as constructive critique! 

I shall agree with Fefe version 3 is the best of all as a matter of presentation. It still doesn't show us though, why Tom is wearing an apron. The background also casts no light in the mystery. Yet is is a nice portrait where unlike the other two, Tom and his beard enjoy some space. I think with large people shooting them from close doesn't flatter them.

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banehawi Critique Team 10822 forum postsbanehawi vcard Canada2821 Constructive Critique Points
27 Sep 2012 - 4:59 PM

Good effort Billy, - and V3 is really good. Of the three, by far the best.


You have the empty space on the wrong side of him, - he should be looking into the space, so thats mod1 Ive uploaded, and it also works well as a portrait crop, which is mod2.


You dont say a lot about the light set up, can you give some details?

Meanwhile, I will take a look at a mod of Vi with some comments on lighting. The lighting looks like its fairly straight on, meaning theres no depth on the face which are provided by shadows from differential lighting, two sources from different directions at different powers. The face, though I know its a healthy red, is a little overly red for me, - and I agree with Kate re inclusing the beard, but I know you were probably limited in what you could do.




Regards



Willie

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canonfan
canonfan  4 United Kingdom
27 Sep 2012 - 7:02 PM

Im no expert at portraits Billy But I agree that V3 is the best of them
Jim

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Irishkate
Irishkate e2 Member 3Irishkate vcard United Kingdom73 Constructive Critique Points
27 Sep 2012 - 9:48 PM

Bit late today catching up.
Your subject has an interesting face with that beard,
but it would have been better if he'd been a bit more relaxed looking.
This comes with practise in talking to your model and capturing them when smiling or
relaxed and preferably looking at you. The eyes are the most important part of a portrait,
so it's food to focus on them and hopefully get a catchlight.
In V3 your model is much more relaxed but it would be better him looking into the space
as banehawi suggests. I like Mod 2 in Portrait format.
Having said all this, I think you've done a great job considering these are probably your
first attempts at portraiture. The light is good in V3.
KateGrinGrinGrinGrin

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paulbroad
paulbroad  781 forum posts United Kingdom845 Constructive Critique Points
28 Sep 2012 - 8:12 AMConstructive Critique!This comment was flagged as constructive critique! 

You need someone in your club who has experience of lighting and you need the lighting too. I assume this is your on camera flash and you will rarely get good formal portraits in studio conditions with that. He is a good subject other than his eyes look part closed, but you need him much further from the background, then a main light to give modelling and a fill or reflector to fill shadows. Main lights are usually at 45 degrees to the side and up emulating the sun, but you put them where you like.

Correct positioning of the main light and background puts any flash/lighting shadows out of the frame.

The sepia image is quite good, but I find the sepia rather too warm. A softer light brown tends to look better.

V3 is the best image, but looks a bit on the under exposed side. May brighten n software.

Get the club program secretary to get a portrait lecturer in from the club circuit.

Paul

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Chinga
Chinga e2 Member 3Chinga vcard United Kingdom
28 Sep 2012 - 3:51 PM

I'm no good at critques ... but I like V3 a lot.... IB

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