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a self-portrait expressing how i've been feeling lately

Camera:Fujifilm FinePix s700
Recording media:digital
Title:Torn in Half
Username:the_guppy the_guppy
Uploaded:3 Jun 2008 - 2:30 PM
Tags:Blue, Digitally manipulated, Photomanipulation, Portrait, Portraits / people, Self portrait, Specialist / abstract
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BubbaG2000
3 Jun 2008 - 2:47 PM

Wow, I can totally relate! You have set the mood here perfectly with the tone, texture and (if I may say) one hell of a facial expression!
I can only wish you feel better soon! Wink

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imander
imander  7388 forum posts United Kingdom7 Constructive Critique Points
3 Jun 2008 - 2:47 PM

excellent processing imo, really like the feel of it, the ripped image is a nice touch, well done
ian

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carmenfuchs
3 Jun 2008 - 2:58 PM

Excellent. Can't really see any room for improvement here. Nice work. =)

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DannyLenihan
3 Jun 2008 - 3:14 PMConstructive Critique!This comment was flagged as constructive critique! 

I really like the idea of this image, although I think you've done waaaaay too much post production on it.

1: A photo like this would really benefit from having a solid identifiable focul point - something really crisp and pin sharp that draws the eye inwards. I would probably done as you have and used the ripped photo as a starting point, but I'd have opened up further on the aperture to give less depth of field. This would really help to create a three-dimensional feel. At the moment the image is quite "flat".

2: The noise and speckle of the shot is total overkill. I think a high ISO number will give this decent texture alone - a good fast film grain is plenty.

3: I would also slightly desaturate the shot to try and create the tone that you are aiming for - the whole image speaks volumes on mood and emotion which can only be enhanced by clever creativity in PS.

4: The lighting, whilst effective, could be greatly improved to enhance the mood of this portrait. I would probably use a softbox or diffuser brolly to one side to create more shadow and depth cross your face, reflecting the light on to both halves of the photo in order to keep it enhanced. If you don't have access to studio lighting, why not stand side-on next to a full length window and expose for the skin tones where the shadows creep in? I think this would really help the image.

Good points:

a: The composition is wonderful. It is well thought out and as good as anyone could make it. I would perhaps think about holding the photo further away from you body to give it better distinction from yourself, which will also help reduce the depth of field.

b: Photo ideas like this are the crux of really good photography. My criticisms are only about the technical aspects of producing such shots, but you should be hugely encouraged for even thinking of this.

I'm very impressed - keep it up!

Danny

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pamelajean Critique Team 8798 forum postspamelajean vcard United Kingdom1612 Constructive Critique Points
3 Jun 2008 - 5:45 PM

My attention is mostly drawn to the torn picture. I noticed that each half is of a different image, which looks a bit odd. Also, it doesn't look like you have just torn the picture apart, but just as if you are holding two halves. Maybe that was your intention. Perhaps it needs to almost still be joined at the bottom, giving more of an impression of being torn at the moment of taking the photograph of the whole? Overall, I like your work on this, and look forward to seeing more.

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Pete Site Moderator 1318456 forum postsPete vcard ePz Advertiser England96 Constructive Critique Points
3 Jun 2008 - 8:28 PM

Incredibly inventive shot. I had my award finger triggered and ready!

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the_guppy
the_guppy  6 New Zealand
4 Jun 2008 - 12:53 AM

thanks for your comments everyone!

DannyJames: thank you so much! lots of really good advice there, i will make sure to make use of it =]

pamelajean: the torn image i am holding is actually the same photo, and the idea was that i was holding the two halves and couldn't choose between them.

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pamelajean Critique Team 8798 forum postspamelajean vcard United Kingdom1612 Constructive Critique Points
6 Jun 2008 - 12:37 AM

Sorry that I misunderstood.

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