Login or Join Now

Upload your photos, chat, win prizes and much more

Username:
Password:
Remember Me

Can't Access your Account?

New to ePHOTOzine? Join ePHOTOzine for free!

Tragic Beauty

Join Now

Join ePHOTOzine, the friendliest photography community.

Upload photos, chat with photographers, win prizes and much more for free!

Add Comment

I know this is not my best photo, but I have gotten out of the loop of photography for a few months. I've been crazy busy with college!
But the other day, I decided to play around a bit and get back into it.
In this photo, I am basically going for simplicity with focus on the eyes and collar bones. I am aiming for a more serious than happy shot, more of a tragic beauty.
Feel free to critique!!! All comments are welcome! I'd love to get back into my photography! Wink

Louise

Brand:Canon
Camera:Canon EOS 20D
Recording media:JPEG (digital)
Date Taken:5 Aug 2012 - 7:55 PM
Focal Length:56mm
Aperture:f/6.3
Shutter Speed:1/25sec
Exposure Comp:0.0
ISO:1600
Exposure Mode:Aperture-priority AE
Metering Mode:Multi-segment
Flash:Off, Did not fire
White Balance:Manual
Title:Tragic Beauty
Username:shadow18 shadow18
Uploaded:21 Sep 2012 - 12:25 AM
Tags:Portraits / people
VS Mode Rating 101 (50% won)
These stats show the percentage of wins and the rating score that your photo has achieved. You can go to the VS Mode by clicking on this icon.

Signup to e2

Signup to e2 to see which photo this has won or lost against in the vs mode
Votes:Voting Disabled
Critque wantedCritique Wanted
Has Modifications Modifications Welcome (Upload a Modification)
Awards have been disabled on this photo

Comments

This photo is here for critique. Please only comment constructively and with suggestions on how to improve it.
Focus_Man
Focus_Man  4481 forum posts United Kingdom631 Constructive Critique Points
21 Sep 2012 - 3:29 PMConstructive Critique!This comment was flagged as constructive critique! 

To me the composition is rather unbalanced, there being too much in the lower section compared with that taken up by the girl's face. The eyes therefore are too high in the frame, perhaps better on a junction of thirds. In addition it is not as sharp as I would have hoped that could be due toone of two things or even both.

1. Your Focal Length demands a shutter speed of around 1/75sec for hand holding, so perhaps that is the cause of camera shake.
2. Given the use of f6.3 perhaps f8 might have given better coverage.

I am sorry to be so negative but I do hope it is helpful.

Frank

Nominating Constructive Critique

Please ensure that you understand what is meant by Constructive Critique - see FAQ here. If you still wish to nominate this comment click Yes

banehawi
banehawi Critique Team 10869 forum postsbanehawi vcard Canada2869 Constructive Critique Points
21 Sep 2012 - 5:46 PMConstructive Critique!This comment was flagged as constructive critique! 

Hi Louise.

I know this is a self portrait, though you havent said so.

Looking at your objective, I think you have achieved what you wanted. You also need to take into account Franks comment about the image being rather long, and it does benefit with space cropped from the bottom as in the mods.

I assume you wither used a tripod, a support like a counter top, or a friend for this? And I wounder if thats why you seem to be slightly bending down to get into the frame?

I like this personally, - its show me a fragility, almost as if your unsure is you should be in the pic. So for the tragic beauty, - beauty certainly, but more tender, fragile that tragic for me, - and it works.


Ive loaded 2 mods. You need to do a little work on accentuating shoulder bone structure with shadows, with with lighting, more angular and dramatic, or in Photoshop, which is what Ive done. Noise is quite pronounced, - you can reduce this with a noise reduction program if you like. Mod2 has a little diffuse glow to soften.


One key thing for me is when there are eyes, and large attractive eyes like this, you really do need catchlights, - so Ive done that also.


Hope this works for you, and welcome back



regards



Willie

Last Modified By banehawi at 21 Sep 2012 - 5:47 PM

Nominating Constructive Critique

Please ensure that you understand what is meant by Constructive Critique - see FAQ here. If you still wish to nominate this comment click Yes

paulbroad
paulbroad  781 forum posts United Kingdom854 Constructive Critique Points
21 Sep 2012 - 8:18 PM

I don't dislike your composition, a bit little girl lost. The quality is not so good as the 20D is old technology and is not so good with high ISO. I still own one, a fine camera but better at up to ISO400. Eyes are just a bit dark too. 9ossible a touch with the dodge tool.

Paul

Nominating Constructive Critique

Please ensure that you understand what is meant by Constructive Critique - see FAQ here. If you still wish to nominate this comment click Yes

shadow18
shadow18  3406 forum posts England
21 Sep 2012 - 8:52 PM

Hey! Thanks everyone for your comments! It's nice to be back!

As I said, I know this isn't really my best photo.
Thanks for all the comments! They are ALWAYS helpful!

I would actually like to learn more about the best way to accentuate collar bone structure, because I haven't researched it much, and I think that would be a fun thing for me to get artistic with and practice! Smile

Yes, you are correct, Willie! Smile it's a sp. I used a countertop type thing in my room. I may try again when it's light. It was just dark when I got all my work done, and then I got in photography mood! Smile so natural light should fix all my iso and blurriness issues! I may use reflection or flash to help with my eyes and bones. Flash would prolly be easier!

Hey! I'm getting back into this! Yay!

Louise

Nominating Constructive Critique

Please ensure that you understand what is meant by Constructive Critique - see FAQ here. If you still wish to nominate this comment click Yes

paulbroad
paulbroad  781 forum posts United Kingdom854 Constructive Critique Points
23 Sep 2012 - 4:35 PM

Lighting is always the way to show any features. Either direction or intensity/quality. Shapes are shown by light and shadow, so master lighting.

Paul

Nominating Constructive Critique

Please ensure that you understand what is meant by Constructive Critique - see FAQ here. If you still wish to nominate this comment click Yes

parob
parob e2 Member 3parob vcard France71 Constructive Critique Points
26 Oct 2012 - 4:46 PM

It has been said before, but when you boost ISO as much, you get noise. I guess the proof is in the pudding. It must be attended to. As well, the over-saturation much be modified, and sharpness has to be improved. But with a JPEG, I am not certain! I won't repeat what is said above regarding the camera's settings; Speed and Aperture. Yet, I have no problem with the aesthetic characteristics of the shot (even more so, if it is a self-portrait, but something in the image must indicate it is.). The subject's expression works as it should. Further, I like the large contrast of skin and cloth. Smile

Nominating Constructive Critique

Please ensure that you understand what is meant by Constructive Critique - see FAQ here. If you still wish to nominate this comment click Yes

shadow18
shadow18  3406 forum posts England
26 Oct 2012 - 5:15 PM

Thank you very much! Smile

Nominating Constructive Critique

Please ensure that you understand what is meant by Constructive Critique - see FAQ here. If you still wish to nominate this comment click Yes

- Original Poster Comments
- Your Posts

Add a Comment

You must be a member to leave a comment

Username:
Password:
Remember me:
Un-tick this box if you want to login each time you visit.