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Photography by 17 year old Australian photographer Marissa Alden

Brand:NIKON CORPORATION
Camera:Nikon D7000 Check out Nikon Nation!
Recording media:JPEG (digital)
Date Taken:6 Mar 2013 - 2:22 PM
Focal Length:18mm
Lens Max Aperture:f/3.5
Aperture:f/3.5
Shutter Speed:1/125sec
Exposure Comp:0.0
ISO:250
Exposure Mode:Aperture-priority AE
Metering Mode:Spot
Flash:On, Return detected
Title:Untitled
Username:marissaalden marissaalden
Uploaded:25 Mar 2014 - 2:47 AM
Tags:Digitally manipulated, Surreal
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Andysnapper
Andysnapper e2 Member 699 forum postsAndysnapper vcard England18 Constructive Critique Points
25 Mar 2014 - 6:40 AM

Excellent. A very interesting idea and technically spot on.

Andy

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Diggeo
Diggeo e2 Member 1Diggeo vcard United Kingdom13 Constructive Critique Points
25 Mar 2014 - 7:48 AM

Great art work! The only think that disturbs me is her closed eyes.

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dudler
dudler Critique Team 1197 forum postsdudler vcard England296 Constructive Critique Points
25 Mar 2014 - 10:01 AMConstructive Critique!This comment was flagged as constructive critique! 

A realy interesting idea, and the overlaying has worked really well.

Personally, I like shots of this sort - with buildings, straight lines, etc. - I'll upload a mod with a slight change to the line of the wall on the left, done with Skew in Transform, using PS Elements.

My only other issue with this is that the composition is a little unstructured and open, so to speak. I'll also crop my mod a bit, to see if I can put the swimmer on the "thirds" of the frame... This is usually the strongest way to place the main subject.

Of course, as this is a combination of two pictures, I imagine that you could do a second version moving the swimemr around the frame as you want!

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mrswoolybill
mrswoolybill Critique Team 7420 forum postsmrswoolybill vcard United Kingdom1005 Constructive Critique Points
25 Mar 2014 - 1:35 PM

Very clever work technically, I think the next area you need to consider here is composition. John's first Mod in particular works for me. It's tighter, more disciplined, more contained.

This sort of image depends on mystery, so cut out context. The water surface at the top isn't necessary, it gives a 'fish tank' look; in the original the main items of interest are central in the frame. Central placement looks static, prosaic. The crop moves both the window and the fireplace to the outer edges - that is more dynamic and also more mysterious, because placed at the edges they imply ways out of the frame.

As a general principle, less information = greater mystery.

There was an amazing photographer here a couple of years back who photographed models underwater. Most of his water uploads have gone, this is the only one of those shots still on the site I think. Worth looking at for ideas.
Moira

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NEWMANP
NEWMANP e2 Member 61583 forum postsNEWMANP vcard United Kingdom574 Constructive Critique Points
25 Mar 2014 - 3:52 PM

ihi,
i like what you are about and this is well put together but a coupe of things trouble me.

the window is blown out and distracting, at first i thought if if was required at all and then maybe its intended to be the light source.

if it is then we have problems because we are not going to get a lightsource from underwater as the frame is likely to have water on the otherside too. i also think the swimer could do with a bit of a contrast boost, it could be my monitor at work is over bright, ill look later.

has all the elements of a top image but may require a few tweaks and a little rethinking
Phil

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chase
chase Critique Team 91118 forum postschase vcard England240 Constructive Critique Points
25 Mar 2014 - 9:01 PM

Love the concept here,well thought out.
Some really good ideas above & a few good mods.
Needs work,I agree but excellent imagination.

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paulbroad
paulbroad  781 forum posts United Kingdom850 Constructive Critique Points
26 Mar 2014 - 5:19 PM

Very well done, indeed. I wonder why, though. Is it for a particular purpose, does it fit a story or is it just an exercise? Whatever, you have done a pretty good job.

Paul

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