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Taken on the job for/at a babyshower. I had so much fun with this. Edited in Photoshop Elements.

Brand:Canon
Camera:Canon EOS 600D
Lens:EF-S18-55mm f/3.5-5.6 IS II
Recording media:JPEG (digital)
Date Taken:15 Jun 2013 - 8:59 AM
Focal Length:36mm
Lens Max Aperture:f/1.0
Aperture:f/5.6
Shutter Speed:1/50sec
Exposure Comp:0.0
ISO:6400
Exposure Mode:Manual
Metering Mode:Multi-segment
Flash:Off, Did not fire
Title:Work: Babyshower
Username:Sone Sone
Uploaded:27 Jun 2013 - 10:05 AM
Tags:Black & white, General
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mrswoolybill
mrswoolybill Critique Team 8530 forum postsmrswoolybill vcard United Kingdom1094 Constructive Critique Points
27 Jun 2013 - 12:04 PM

Very attractively done. I like the way you have thought this out, and used the light.
The only critique that I would make here is that the napkin makes the image a bit top-heavy, and it drags the eye upwards away from the name, which is the important bit. I would prefer the simple reverse-L shape of the plate and glass. So a crop at the top - it will still leave the distant napkins in the image. I might also add a bit more contrast, just for the highlights. Mod to follow, see what you think.
Moira

Last Modified By mrswoolybill at 27 Jun 2013 - 12:07 PM

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mrswoolybill Critique Team 8530 forum postsmrswoolybill vcard United Kingdom1094 Constructive Critique Points
27 Jun 2013 - 12:10 PM

I've added a Mod, looking at it I should have taken just a few more pixels off the top. But you'll get the general idea...

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paulbroad
paulbroad e2 Member 789 forum postspaulbroad vcard United Kingdom880 Constructive Critique Points
27 Jun 2013 - 3:45 PM

It must have been nearly dark for that ISO. A bit over exposed in general and the gross over exposure of the background does nothing for the effect at all. The idea is good, but you needed a more balanced exposure to reduce the huge contrast range and that would not be easy here.

Paul

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mrswoolybill
mrswoolybill Critique Team 8530 forum postsmrswoolybill vcard United Kingdom1094 Constructive Critique Points
27 Jun 2013 - 4:14 PMConstructive Critique!This comment was flagged as constructive critique! 

Interesting comment from Paul. The exposure is pretty good on the plate and name, which is what matters. Could maybe do with a bit less, but not a lot. The background is how light looks when we are indoors in dim light and squint into bright sun flooding through a window; imagine this in watercolour paints, it looks right.

Last Modified By mrswoolybill at 27 Jun 2013 - 4:16 PM

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banehawi
banehawi Critique Team 10988 forum postsbanehawi vcard Canada2985 Constructive Critique Points
27 Jun 2013 - 9:29 PM

Happy Birthday Marcell. Nice idea and effort thats mostly worked.

Assign the sRGB colour profile to the image when uploading to the web, - it doesnt change it, but allows Photoshop an easier time to sort it out.

I agree re top heavy, but as its a mono, just invert the shot, apply a black mask, and paint the napkin with thite to bring back the inverted colour and tones.

Sharpen it a touch more, as well as a little more contrast.

the blown background looks better when blurred more, which is what would be possible if you were to use a large aperture lens, allowing you to shoot at f/2.8. Otherwise its photoshop as done in the mod. View large.



regards


Willie

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pamelajean
pamelajean Critique Team 8831 forum postspamelajean vcard United Kingdom1638 Constructive Critique Points
27 Jun 2013 - 9:36 PM

The main elements are on the plate, which you have nicely in focus.
By moving a little more to the left, the wine glass would not sit against the right-hand frame, and would become more of an element, being brought further inside the frame.
The brightness at the top of the image draws my eye, so I have gone for a square crop in my modification, removing that part, which inevitably cuts off the top of the wine glass.
There is something sitting directly behind the glass, which I cloned out, and I also adjusted the contrast.
Not an easy subject with which to get a good composition, but the important elements are there, and you have some nice highlights in the plate, fork and glass, and of course the contrast between china, metal and glass works well too.
Pamela.

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Sone
Sone e2 Member 1Sone vcard South Africa
28 Jun 2013 - 7:19 AM

Thank you all for your comments. Wow, the Modifications make a difference, thank you for that as well. *

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