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Another shot taken at last week's Focus In Imaging. Tried to convert this to mono but not sure about it so I thought I would stick it up for mods as I am trying to learn what looks right etc here...thansk for looking.

Camera:Canon EOS 50D
Recording media:JPEG (digital)
Title:Monika in Mono
Username:Alan_Coles Alan_Coles
Uploaded:14 Mar 2010 - 8:31 PM
Tags:Black & white, General, Monika, Portraits / people
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andy210966
14 Mar 2010 - 8:41 PM

A nicely produced image here with really nice tonal balance throughout and a good and viewable pose. I do feel that this may work a little better with a slightly tighter crop though.

Andy

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martyn05
martyn05  7363 forum posts England
14 Mar 2010 - 9:15 PM

It seems to me that the model is leaning over slightly, not sure if this was intentional, but I have uploaded a mod with a tighter crop.

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Morgs
Morgs  6 Wales62 Constructive Critique Points
14 Mar 2010 - 9:41 PM

I like the pose, I like the end result re processing. For me Al, she's too central, and I would crop to one side and use dead space on the other to balance the image....just my opinion for what it's worth.

Dave

Last Modified By Morgs at 14 Mar 2010 - 9:41 PM

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Maiwand
Maiwand e2 Member 7Maiwand vcard England69 Constructive Critique Points
14 Mar 2010 - 10:07 PM

Fine shot Alan. As my PF will show I am not too knowledgeable about portraiture so all I can say is I find the shot most appealing.
Ron

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pluckyfilly
pluckyfilly e2 Member 8283 forum postspluckyfilly vcard United Kingdom33 Constructive Critique Points
14 Mar 2010 - 10:11 PM

a few blown highlights but otherwise a well taken shot, I like Andy's mod - bit of a learning curve I feel and one I do not have much experience of

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SteveMoulding
SteveMoulding e2 Member 5SteveMoulding vcard United Kingdom7 Constructive Critique Points
14 Mar 2010 - 10:21 PM

A very pleasing portrait of a beautiful girl. A little over exposed in my opinion but that doesn't detract from the image.
Steve.

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banehawi
banehawi Critique Team 10901 forum postsbanehawi vcard Canada2898 Constructive Critique Points
15 Mar 2010 - 12:05 AMConstructive Critique!This comment was flagged as constructive critique! 

Lots of useful tips already, - the main one being that its usually best to have the subject off centre. In addition, shes too low in the frame, - her eyes will look best on about a third.

Its a little hot in spots, reflection from her skin, so in the mod I reduced exposure by using a multiply layer at 40%. Youve got good catch lights in her eyes, and I like how her head is tilted.

Apart from that cropped tightly. and increased the tilt of her head slightly; increased contrast, sharpened a little.


Hope this helps,



Regards


Willie

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cassiecat
cassiecat  639 forum posts England46 Constructive Critique Points
15 Mar 2010 - 2:15 AM

looks like youve had some useful tips here.like the off central crops of the 1st and 3rd mod.lesley

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Alan_Coles
15 Mar 2010 - 6:15 AM

Thanks all, some great tips and mods. As most would know this sort of photography is not my usual thing but it is something I would like to try in the future at some point.

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paulbroad
paulbroad  781 forum posts United Kingdom860 Constructive Critique Points
15 Mar 2010 - 9:00 AM

Technically nice and a good conversion, but why all the space. Crop no. 3 is good - not sure about the other two, but I would come in even closer on that attractive face.

Shows like focus are not condusive to good portraiture and as such you have done rather well. I will post a shot taken at Focus of one of these portraiture scrums - an absolute melee which I keep out of.

Paul

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