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My 2nd submission of Ellie.

I would love some critique to help me improve my shooting and post processing. I use lightroom 4.

Thanks again to all those who have commented on my previous images. I fing this site a great way to improve.

Dave

Brand:Canon
Camera:Canon EOS 600D
Lens:EF24-105mm F/4L IS USM
Recording media:JPEG (digital)
Date Taken:3 Feb 2013 - 1:59 PM
Focal Length:84mm
Lens Max Aperture:f/4.0
Aperture:f/5.6
Shutter Speed:1/125sec
Exposure Comp:0.0
ISO:400
Exposure Mode:Aperture-priority AE
Metering Mode:Multi-segment
Flash:Off, Did not fire
White Balance:Auto
Title:Ellie-2
Username:david1810 david1810
Uploaded:5 Apr 2013 - 3:49 AM
Tags:General, Nude / glamour, Portraits / people
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handlerstudio
handlerstudio e2 Member 2handlerstudio vcard United States5 Constructive Critique Points
5 Apr 2013 - 4:36 AM

I like the light, its softness and low contrast, showing off her lips and eyes dramatically. Her directness, staring at us (and, of course, the lens) makes for a revealing portrait. I quite like it.

Peter

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gwynn56
gwynn56  260 forum posts England
5 Apr 2013 - 5:11 AM

nice capture Smile

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david1810
david1810  2 Australia
5 Apr 2013 - 5:19 AM

Thanks Peter and Gwynn56

This was taken on my shaded front balcony using natural light.

I have enjoyed using lightroom to enhance the images I shot that day with Ellie and her sister Sarah.

Thanks for taking time to comment

Dave

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CaroleS
CaroleS e2 Member 429 forum postsCaroleS vcard United Kingdom3 Constructive Critique Points
5 Apr 2013 - 9:27 AM

A lovely face with direct contact with those beautiful eyes, I like the lighting too.

My monitor shows up a light band running from her bottom lip to chin. I also think if you had changed her head angle to tilting down slightly you would have prevented her neck being quite so prominent.

Carole

Last Modified By CaroleS at 5 Apr 2013 - 9:27 AM

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cats_123
cats_123 e2 Member 103999 forum postscats_123 vcard Northern Ireland24 Constructive Critique Points
5 Apr 2013 - 9:49 AM

had a little play in Lightroom Smile

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paulbroad
paulbroad  681 forum posts United Kingdom842 Constructive Critique Points
5 Apr 2013 - 1:39 PM

Very proficient indeed. Just not sure about the head offset to the right. Think in the middle would better suite this.

Paul

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mgts24
mgts24  3 United Kingdom
5 Apr 2013 - 4:55 PM

Really nice shot. Love her eyes, and the fabric. Did you crop the right side at all? If you could include more of her hair I think the balance would be better. Otherwise, it's tremendous! Well done.

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garlter
garlter  6 United Kingdom1 Constructive Critique Points
5 Apr 2013 - 6:48 PM

Beautiful portrait, fabulous lighting bringing out the models lovely facial features.

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GeorgePlatis
GeorgePlatis e2 Member 1GeorgePlatis vcard Greece1 Constructive Critique Points
5 Apr 2013 - 9:07 PM

Excellent portrait !
George

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Robert51
Robert51  5 United Kingdom14 Constructive Critique Points
8 Apr 2013 - 9:40 AM

Super picture Dave.
Hope you like the mod

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david1810
david1810  2 Australia
9 Apr 2013 - 1:44 AM

Thankyou all for your comments and mods. It is great to know I am improving.

Thanks again

Dave

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Fogey
Fogey  168 forum posts United Kingdom13 Constructive Critique Points
9 Apr 2013 - 12:01 PM

This is a nice shot, bordering on professional. As has been mentioned, the subject being off centre, just doesn't seem to gel, to my eye.

While this image is presented in portrait format, there is a lot to be said for shooting portraits in landscape format and using the placing of the subject in the frame to accentuate the model's look, stance, demeanour, etc.

Well worth experimenting with.

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dudler
dudler Critique Team 1092 forum postsdudler vcard England259 Constructive Critique Points
9 Apr 2013 - 5:46 PM

I find this quite reminiscent of Steve McCurry's Afghan Girl picture. Same even, revealing light, and a model looking deep into the lens.

My feeling is that the headscarf justifies the composition on the thirds really well, and provides a counterpoint to the light-toned face.

A symmetrical shot would be good, but a completely different picture, and not necessarily better in this case.

Similarly, a landscape-format shot could be great fro al lthe reasons that Fogey suggests - and would be another shot entirely, again.

Incidentally, the sweeping lines of the smallish areas of the model's hair that are visible add quite a bit to the overall feel of the image.

Last Modified By dudler at 9 Apr 2013 - 5:47 PM

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