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Thank you all for your comments and suggested improvements for jenny 1. Have used your suggestions and worked up another image jenny 2.

Natural light, no flash.

Would love any comments/critiques that will help me improve. Processed using lightroom 4.

thanks again for your time and support.

Dave

Brand:Canon
Camera:Canon EOS 600D
Lens:EF24-105mm F/4L IS USM
Recording media:JPEG (digital)
Date Taken:4 May 2013 - 1:36 PM
Focal Length:98mm
Lens Max Aperture:f/4.0
Aperture:f/4.5
Shutter Speed:1/125sec
Exposure Comp:0.0
ISO:400
Exposure Mode:Aperture-priority AE
Metering Mode:Multi-segment
Flash:Off, Did not fire
White Balance:Auto
Title:jenny 2
Username:david1810 david1810
Uploaded:30 Nov 2013 - 4:49 AM
Tags:General, Portraits / people
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paulbroad
paulbroad  781 forum posts United Kingdom854 Constructive Critique Points
30 Nov 2013 - 9:06 AM

Potentially a loverly portrait of a pretty girl. Natural light, but it just seems a touch flat, even with olive skin and there is virtually no hair detail. Will try a mod.

Paul

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paulbroad
paulbroad  781 forum posts United Kingdom854 Constructive Critique Points
30 Nov 2013 - 9:13 AM

Mod tried. You were under exposed. Multi-segment can get it wrong when tones are so different. Light skin, half the frame, dark, half the frame. Biased to the skin and thus a bit under.

Paul

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banehawi
banehawi Critique Team 10869 forum postsbanehawi vcard Canada2869 Constructive Critique Points
30 Nov 2013 - 3:41 PM

Hi David.

I agree with paul on this one, and have a few more observations.

The metering mode would likely be best at the default centre weighted average. From my own experience, it will work in most situations.

Opening the image file indicates that you have done quite a bit of editing already, though I would doubt that you decreased exposure? Its a full stop (-1) underexposed, and changing the metering mode may help with this.

When the exposure is corrected, I find my eye drawn by the large expanse of her neck and left (her left) shoulder, so adding some shading, or vignette as Ive done in the mod may be beneficial.
Lifting shadow detail, as Paul had also done, helps separate her hair from the background, gives it more detail, and in general is a better approach.

The light is coming from the front of her face, so it will be evenly lit. This is a popular approach to lighting for magazine shots, but it tends to give a flat light, menaing that facisl contours and detail is less obvious that it would be if the light ws coming more from one side than the other, which naturally creates shadows, and therefore depth.

But overall, quite good, apart from underexposure. In LR, using the exposure panel, and looking at the histogram, you would see quite easily that the histogram didnt extend to the right, and ended up just past halfway across the chart, - and this would have been a good time to correct this, - unless you wanted an underexposed image. In LR, you have an adjustment brush, so that if you did increase exposure, you could remove it from areas of the shot that you didnt want brighter, such as her left shoulder as an example.




Regards


Willie

Last Modified By banehawi at 30 Nov 2013 - 3:41 PM

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