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Long exposure of the break water at Waikiki Beach break water.

Looking for any help on improving my shooting or processing skills. Using Lightroom 4 for processing.

thanks for looking

Dave

Brand:Canon
Camera:Canon EOS 5D MkIII
Lens:EF24-105mm F/4L IS USM
Recording media:JPEG (digital)
Date Taken:27 Apr 2014 - 2:35 PM
Focal Length:28mm
Lens Max Aperture:f/4.0
Aperture:f/9.0
Shutter Speed:25sec
Exposure Comp:+2/3
ISO:320
Exposure Mode:Aperture-priority AE
Metering Mode:Multi-segment
Flash:Off, Did not fire
White Balance:Auto
Title:Waikiki Break Water - black and white
Username:david1810 david1810
Uploaded:15 Jun 2014 - 11:52 AM
Tags:Beach, Black & white, Break water, Landscape / travel, Long exposure, Sea scape
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mrswoolybill
mrswoolybill Critique Team 7435 forum postsmrswoolybill vcard United Kingdom1024 Constructive Critique Points
15 Jun 2014 - 12:12 PMConstructive Critique!This comment was flagged as constructive critique! 

I like this a lot, particularly the way the foreground lines create a link between here and there. We know where we are standing, we know that there is a considerable distance to the far shore, but there's a way to get there. That diagonal whatever-it-is actually seems to be advancing on the city; and what I really like is that it has a companion following on behind.

I also like the way that the strong textures lower left balance the height of the buildings upper right.

Super b&w, hard, cold and bright.

Just one suggestion - a small crop from the left side of the frame. Diagonal lead-ins are strongest when they enter the frame from a corner; diagonals starting midway along an edge are weaker, somehow unsatisfactory. And the empty space on the left of the frame gives an imbalance to the composition for my eye.

Modification to follow shortly - but I won't change anything apart from the crop.
Moira

Last Modified By mrswoolybill at 15 Jun 2014 - 12:20 PM

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paulbroad
paulbroad  781 forum posts United Kingdom854 Constructive Critique Points
15 Jun 2014 - 12:20 PM

Very strong with a lot of impact. Not much to do. Works in mono, but also, I would think, in colour. As a wall or exhibition print, the mono is great, as an image for libraries, then colour.

Paul

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dudler Critique Team 11103 forum postsdudler vcard England314 Constructive Critique Points
15 Jun 2014 - 4:02 PM

I'm really intrigued that the EXIF data says plus 2/3 stop exposure!

This is pretty much faultless, as Moira and Paul have said. Moira's crop is good: we can be hemmed in by the format of a camera viewfinder sometimes.

This would get votes in the main gallery: a colour version, I suspect, gaining more than this wonderful mono image.

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david1810
david1810  2 Australia
16 Jun 2014 - 8:31 AM

Thank you all for taking the time to comment. This website has helped me heaps in improving my skills. You support is very much appreciated.

Dudler the 2/3 plus exposure is confusing me as well. I took a lot of images whilst away perhaps it was set for an earlier image and I forgot to set it back. I don't recall deliberately setting it for this shot although I often try adjustments based on the histogram and trying to move it to the right.

regards

Dave

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salopian
salopian e2 Member 2salopian vcard United Kingdom18 Constructive Critique Points
16 Jun 2014 - 10:35 AM

Really atmospheric night time shot - hard to find anything to criticise. I think Moira's crop works well and the buildings top right seem to be leaning outwards a touch, so I have done a mod straightening them up and incorporating Moira's mod - being very picky though!

Geoff

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mrswoolybill Critique Team 7435 forum postsmrswoolybill vcard United Kingdom1024 Constructive Critique Points
16 Jun 2014 - 11:28 AM

Thanks for great feedback Dave.
Moira

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