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I tried to make the trees as a frame and crop the bottom (16:9) to arrange it as ROT. Wants to hear your opinion. Thank you.

Brand:FUJIFILM
Camera:Fujifilm FinePix S2950HD
Recording media:JPEG (digital)
Date Taken:1 Jul 2012 - 5:53 AM
Focal Length:12.3mm
Lens Max Aperture:f/3.1
Aperture:f/8.0
Shutter Speed:1/8sec
Exposure Comp:0.0
ISO:200
Exposure Mode:Manual
Metering Mode:Multi-segment
Flash:Off, Did not fire
Title:Mount Ciremai
Username:arhab arhab
Uploaded:30 Jul 2012 - 8:51 AM
Tags:Landscape / travel
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Focus_Man
Focus_Man  4481 forum posts United Kingdom631 Constructive Critique Points
30 Jul 2012 - 3:04 PM

Hi Muhamad, for me I am afraid the trees have failed to produce a frame for your distant vista and although you have cropped the base to comply with RoT, your main subject doesn't comply, and that I feel is more important. It would be better I feel, if you were also to place your mountain top a third of the way in from one side or the other dependent upon ancilliary features.

The outcome is aslo a little fuzzy and lacks clear detail, did you use a tripod? I note your shutter speed of 1/8sec, that is why I am asking. Your aperture is fine ans so I do feel more detail should be present overall.

Frank

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Davesumner
1 Aug 2012 - 5:12 AMConstructive Critique!This comment was flagged as constructive critique! 

Hi Muhamad,

Some great advice from Frank above but for me the main issue with the shot is its overall flat appearance with washed out colours. You have your horizon onto the bottom thirds line and having the mountain central to the shot doesn't bother me either. The trees at either side do sort of keep you into the image so overall it works okay however, remember with shots like this that you need to take the viewer on a trip through your image starting with some foreground interest followed by middle ground and then on to the background. In you case you have the latter two but there isn't much in the foreground to get us moving through the image.

I've created a mod where I added some contrast and increased the colours on the field and building. I then sharpened.

Hope this helps

DaVeS

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arhab
arhab e2 Member 243 forum postsarhab vcard Indonesia2 Constructive Critique Points
4 Aug 2012 - 11:54 AM

@Frank: This taken before I had the tripod, so you are right this is a little fuzzy. But the focus and and the exposure are ok from the exif i read. I understood your point about the mount position. Thank you Smile

@Dave: Still struggling on composition Dave, and it is not easy to unite all of the element but i understood your point. About the colour, truely i am bad on this. I think mine is ok, but you show me the better one. Smile thank you.

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