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thanks 4 your critiques.

Camera:Pentax K10D Check out PENTAXPORTAL!
Lens:18-55 mm
Recording media:JPEG (digital)
Title:Square light
Username:Bogdan_Fiscutean Bogdan_Fiscutean
Uploaded:13 Jun 2008 - 1:30 PM
Tags:Black & white, Close-up / macro, Eye
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fauxtography
13 Jun 2008 - 2:16 PMConstructive Critique!This comment was flagged as constructive critique! 

Interesting crop, you have taken, however there are a couple of areas that could be improved. You've got some blur in the model, looks like motion blur from them, but it could be a bit of camera shake. Compositionally, it'd be a a stronger image if the model was further to the left, as the large dark area there does not really add much to the shot, and you'd give them plenty of space to look into.

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zarquon
zarquon  647 forum posts England55 Constructive Critique Points
15 Jun 2008 - 10:47 AMConstructive Critique!This comment was flagged as constructive critique! 

A monochrome image that tends towards shadow tones. Some blurring of the image that looks like it was most likely due to subject movement (possibly camera shake?) so the image is not really sharp. The bright highlight next to the nose is not square so I guess you were referring to the highlight seen in the subjects eye.

In which case I would lose the distraction in front of your subject's nose. It overpowers the model and reduces the viewer's ability to focus on the highlight in the eye of your model. Without the guidance from your title, the observer would not know what to look at and the eye does not easily rest on the eye of the model.

Opening up the shadow detail would help the viewer to see the eye and sharpness of the eye is critical to this composition. I offer a crop that may help to illustrate my words. I have lightened the image and sharpened it slight and cropped hard to remove the light in the background. I would probably crop so that only the eye is shown but I wanted to reduce the strength of the competitive highlight to lead you in that general direction.

Your portfolio shows that you have a good eye for an image. I think that the technical execution of this image does nothing to underline your obvious skill with a camera. I would be very interested to see the result, if you were to rethink this concept again and then present another version.

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Last Modified By zarquon at 15 Jun 2008 - 10:51 AM

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