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banehawi (Critique Team)

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9 Jun 2011 - 10:49 PM

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Its a nice, competent shot. The lighting has done what you wanted.

For me, the expression isnt working to engage the shooter or the viewer. A slight smile, a tilt of the head to one side, all would help.

In addition, theres a slight red cast overall which isnt bad, but can look better without it.

Ive loaded a few mods, - one change in al is that Ive added canvas to the right to place her off centre, and Ive made changes to the tone, sharpness, and expression in mods 2 and three.


Hope this is helpful,

regards

Willie

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paulbroad

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10 Jun 2011 - 7:01 AM

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Whilst the composition is classic, the problem with this technically excellent image is that she looks fed up. You need a bit of a smile, and I get the impression she doesn't like me. (Some, surprisingly, don't!)

Paul

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Focus_Man

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10 Jun 2011 - 9:15 AM

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Technically very good, compositionally, a little space needed to the RHS to place here eyes left of centre, certainly no further than centre. As has been mentioned the model's facial expression lets it down as, for me, does the piercing above her upper lip! I would also have been tempted to clone or brush out the mole to here right cheek.

Frank

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