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I was after just a nice innocent looking hi-key shot. I think I got it along with some excellent eye contact and that hair is just beautiful

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Title:Bashful
Username:TheStagMan TheStagMan
Uploaded:20 Jun 2012 - 2:24 PM
Tags:Portraits / people
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lawbert
lawbert  71713 forum posts England15 Constructive Critique Points
20 Jun 2012 - 2:59 PMConstructive Critique!This comment was flagged as constructive critique! 

Hello Mike
A lovely model and set without doubt.
But for me the flash at the rear, on her rear!, is slightly overpowered causing quite a big over exposed patch on the image and a big shadow under her.
The same over exposure is visible on her arms.
Perhaps powering the flashes down slightly or a touch more aperture would have killed the Over Exposure, also maybe a speedlite on camera would kill the shadow.
Its a superb image all the same.
All the Best
Paul

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paulcr
paulcr  91536 forum posts Ireland9 Constructive Critique Points
20 Jun 2012 - 3:05 PM

I totally agree with your own description of the portrait. I'm not the best, technically, when it comes to lighting but I do think you've achieved a beautiful portrait here. Hi-key, pose, model etc all come together really well. Reminded me of the movie 5th Element. Paul

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TheStagMan
20 Jun 2012 - 3:12 PM

Thanks both for your comments

Lawbert - I see exactly what you mean, I was using Rossberg natural permanent light, lights and twiddling my ISO setting adjust the lighting. My lighting skills still have a lot to be desired. But, Im getting there, abet slowly Smile

Paulcr - you mean Leeloo ? Didn't think of that. But, now you say it .. yes lol

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paulcr
paulcr  91536 forum posts Ireland9 Constructive Critique Points
20 Jun 2012 - 3:15 PM

Yep, thats her. Played by Milla Jovovich Smile
Paul

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alto333
alto333  2 Ireland
20 Jun 2012 - 3:17 PM

Beautiful contrast of flaming hair and white blurred background. stunning girl but oh the socks......

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TheStagMan
20 Jun 2012 - 3:21 PM

"the socks" dont you keep your socks on lol ...

Yes I looked at them after the event and I thought hmm perhaps they should have come off ...

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aeras
aeras  2 Cyprus6 Constructive Critique Points
20 Jun 2012 - 3:29 PM

Beautiful quality of light.

For me light levels are good but I agree with comments about the socks (toes end) .

Also the red hair showing under the models legs should be cloned out , along with the RHS furniture (drawers).
being picky I would move the chair that "touches" her head competing for attention a bit to the left of the frame.
other than those details , a very fine shot indeed , Well done !

Charles

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loronzo
loronzo  4 United Kingdom
20 Jun 2012 - 3:33 PM

Beautiful image nicely captured .L..

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TheStagMan
20 Jun 2012 - 3:35 PM

Thanks for all the comments, all very helpful .. Never even considered the chair .....Smile

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answersonapostcard Site Moderator 1012604 forum postsanswersonapostcard vcard United Kingdom15 Constructive Critique Points
20 Jun 2012 - 3:37 PM

I love the socks Smile

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banehawi
banehawi Critique Team 10868 forum postsbanehawi vcard Canada2869 Constructive Critique Points
20 Jun 2012 - 3:59 PM

I like this, and the socks. I think the fact its intended as a high-key image is being overlooked to some extent. The model and pose are great. I would like to see the eyes brighter, and catchlights. The comments re overexposure are correct, but I wonder if high key is intended, just how much overexposure you would need, - not being a lighting expert? What the bright light has done though is wash out the skin colour to an alabaster white, which looks statue like to me.

I loaded 2 mods, one with exposure and skin colour corrected, eye lighter and catchlights; and the second mod has a diffuse glow applied, - perhaps one way to get a softer look. Perhaps also post processing is the better way to obtain a high key effect, once the basics are in place? Both mods have the edge of that piece of furniture on the right cropped out.



Hope this is helpful,



Regards



Willie

Last Modified By banehawi at 20 Jun 2012 - 4:00 PM

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TheStagMan
20 Jun 2012 - 4:10 PM

Hi Wille

The overall idea was to go for a very Hi Key image ... But I like your Mod2, except for the eyes, I don't know, they look almost too white ...

Thanks

Mike

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paulbroad
paulbroad  781 forum posts United Kingdom854 Constructive Critique Points
20 Jun 2012 - 5:13 PM

Very nice in general but you are making your own comments before we do. I realise you are going for high key and you have it. The jury is out on if you have some over exposure - there is detail there so I'm inclined to think all is well - just. Very nice glamour and the hair and socks entirely suite this type of fantasy image.

Good stuff with a lovely pose, pointed hands and feet. So many photographers allow models to put weight on arms and legs causing bulging muscles.

Paul

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banehawi
banehawi Critique Team 10868 forum postsbanehawi vcard Canada2869 Constructive Critique Points
20 Jun 2012 - 5:29 PM

Shadow tool only used on the eyes Mike, - no whitening.


W

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Sooty_1
Sooty_1 Critique Team 41207 forum posts United Kingdom198 Constructive Critique Points
21 Jun 2012 - 9:36 AM

It's mostly been said above, but:
The furniture intruding in the RHS could be cropped.
The chair could be a foot to the left to deconflict with the model's head.
I don't have a problem with the socks being there, but would prefer the model's left foot to be straight like the other limbs, at the moment, it's scrunched up.
The tiny bit of hair under her knee could be got rid of.

Only about 1/2 stop overexposed. The high key effect is what you were after, and that is what you got. If you reduce the exposure too much (as in Willie's mod), you lose the delicate nature of the model. You start to get skin details and flaws. In the original, the skin looks flawless (which is every model's dream). Re the catchlights, you need a tiny spot of light to make the eyes look alive, but in reality, you wouldn't expect much as the lighting and pose are keeping her face from direct light. Anything OTT will look false.

Tiny tweaks really, but otherwise a very capable shot. I've seen far worse published.

Nick

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SueEley
SueEley e2 Member 8271 forum postsSueEley vcard Wales96 Constructive Critique Points
21 Jun 2012 - 7:31 PM

I like the high key, like the socks, find the furniture a bit much and dislike the hair that appears in the crook of her knee. You do achieve an innocent look.

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robCPS
robCPS  6 United Kingdom
21 Jun 2012 - 9:30 PM

Beautiful shot of a beautiful model and you are dead right, the eye contact & hair are great,

Rob

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