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This is my first attempt at taking a portrait. used bounce flash . all comments will be appreciated.

Camera:Sony A350
Lens:Sony 18-70
Recording media:JPEG (digital)
Title:Danielle
Username:cedaray cedaray
Uploaded:27 Jul 2010 - 1:37 PM
Tags:Danielle, Flash, Flash / lighting, General, Portrait, Portraits / people
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samarmishra
27 Jul 2010 - 2:21 PM

Hi, I think this is a great attempt, probably one of the finest attempt. For me it is excellent looking image but as I too not perfect in portrait so can't comment in confidence but anywhich way I liked the concept the background, the presentation and a very pretty looking model.
Great attempt.

Samar..

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banehawi
banehawi Critique Team 10849 forum postsbanehawi vcard Canada2841 Constructive Critique Points
27 Jul 2010 - 3:19 PM

A very good first effort Ray, and a good attempt also at a high key effect.

As Frank mentioned above this can look better with a less central placement in the frame.

I would also suggest a little more contrast. and I would not burn away as much of her hair as in this ****. For me, - a personal opinion, it gives a slightly ghostly, floating impression.

Having said that, many portrait shooters would be quite happy with this.

I have included a mod with my suggestions.

Hope this is helpful,


regards


Willie

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chensuriashi e2 Member 8132 forum postschensuriashi vcard England17 Constructive Critique Points
27 Jul 2010 - 3:26 PM

It is a top portrait and will be great in a frame wherever the eyes are, processed fine I am going to try to get this Hi Key effect on an old shot soon as I can...Thanks for the inspiration...Chen.

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paulbroad
paulbroad  781 forum posts United Kingdom850 Constructive Critique Points
27 Jul 2010 - 8:26 PM

The image, as a high key portrait is well done and pleasant to view, but high key portraits should have full tones in the eyes, and her eyes are very washy -- looking a bit strange to me. A pity as the vignetting and eveything else is great.


No one elese seems to have commented, but look at the pupils, they should be black, and they are a number of shades of grey.

Paul

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cedaray
cedaray  5 United Kingdom
28 Jul 2010 - 9:01 PM

Many thanks for all your comments which I find very helpful,
Thank you.
Ray

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