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The Score (Movement Pt II)

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This is a re-shoot of my previous image. Things that I have altered - the candle on it's own wasn't enough to give me enough light, so I made myself a snoot and attached it to a flashgun. This was triggered in the same way as the other image.

Levels, white balance, overall contrast, etc were adjusted in Capture and the parchment effect and some burning of the green baize was made in PS to try and emulate the shading effect from the back of the candle.

The aim - as with the previous shot, was to try and create a kind of 'period' feel to this.

All comments and crit welcomed...!

Thanks

Chris

Camera:Nikon D70 Check out Nikon Nation!
Lens:Nikkor 50mm f/1.8 Check out Nikon Nation!
Recording media:ISO 200
Title:The Score (Movement Pt II)
Username:chrisw chrisw
Uploaded:29 Oct 2006 - 3:13 AM
Tags:Allegro, Candle, Classical, Creative, Flash / lighting, General, Manuscript, Movement, Mozart, Music, Pen, Quill, Score, Warm, Writing
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margram
margram  8
29 Oct 2006 - 3:35 AM

Definitely has the feel of authenticity. Lighting and composition are very pleasing. The wax running down the side of the candle is a nice touch. All around lovely.

Marg

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Skodster
Skodster  8902 forum posts Ireland
29 Oct 2006 - 4:46 AM

I like the suggestion of an old master at work here. The lighting is good.

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AnnaBanana
29 Oct 2006 - 5:40 AM

I agree - definitely a feel of authenticity here. I really like the light and the thought that a long-ago creative genius put his quill down for a moment.... great work!

Anna Smile

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KarenFB
KarenFB Junior Gallery Team 84281 forum postsKarenFB vcard England163 Constructive Critique Points
29 Oct 2006 - 7:27 AM

Yes, a definate improvement. The lighting has more of a suggestion of candle light and using a quill instead of a pen helps too. Good work.

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Tooth
Tooth  95772 forum posts Ireland227 Constructive Critique Points
29 Oct 2006 - 8:47 AM

Chris, you're certainly dedicated and went to the trouble of getting the feather! I do think this is closer to authenticity, the small circle of dim light given by (or apparently so) the candle, and I like the fact it's all within the frame now. Jools' point in the last pic. about the writing is a good one - a little bit too neat and structured - you could imagine a tortured genius staying up all night by candllelight scribbling away and making corrections as he/she went..but it's hard to say whether that would actually detract from the image.

Goos work, keep it coming

Stephen

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joolsb
joolsb  927115 forum posts Switzerland38 Constructive Critique Points
29 Oct 2006 - 9:35 AM

Hi Chris,

Like this version a lot more. As Stephen says, it does have the look of authenticity about it. Plus, changing the lighting has given it more atmosphere. I can't think of anything more you could do to improve it!

Depending on your audience, and on how much of a perfectionist you (or they) are, you could research facsimiles of old musical manuscripts but that would probably be taking things a little far.

One thing that has just occurred to me, you could try making the paper look a little less perfect - strategic stains, ink blobs, etc. Just a thought.

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chrisw
chrisw  10129 forum posts
29 Oct 2006 - 11:06 AM

Thanks for the comments everyone - and thanks to those that commented on the previous one for pointing me in the right direction!

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Cj-Photography
29 Oct 2006 - 11:32 AM

like this a lot. Wink

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Carabosse
Carabosse e2 Member 1139450 forum postsCarabosse vcard England269 Constructive Critique Points
29 Oct 2006 - 12:47 PM

Nice pic! Grin

Yes this is much more effective than the previous version. Nothing to add to what is said above. Mozart (my fave composer) would be pleased with this!!

Presumably you will now have it printed and hung on your wall? Smile

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chrisw
chrisw  10129 forum posts
29 Oct 2006 - 12:53 PM

Thanks CB Smile

Probably get it printed and hung on me mum's wall, actually! Wink

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strawman
strawman  1022006 forum posts United Kingdom16 Constructive Critique Points
29 Oct 2006 - 8:31 PM

Chris I think you have made some significant and very good improvements to this image.

The light drop off add to the mystery/mood of the image.

I think it is a photo to be proud of. I hope you do too.

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chrisw
chrisw  10129 forum posts
29 Oct 2006 - 9:04 PM

Thank you very much. Guess I need to see things with more of an analytical eye - when it was all pointed out with the other image, it kind of became glaringly obvious! Thanks again

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